Writing Feedback / Ielts_writing2: poor children better at solving problems than rich children? [9]

princedynasty,

It was a great pleasure reading your essay with a wide grammatical range and vocabulary. However, your essay is too lengthy for IELTS (title says) as it needs just 250 words, and also as Dumi suggested, the task is more about persuading the reading on the argument rather than beefing it up with multiple reasons. It means that one should consider one or two main ideas per paragraph which can be well supported with examples.

Writing Feedback / Education is undeniably the driving force in every country's evolution. [6]

Amazing essay! I can not believe this has been produced in 40 minutes. In my view your essays deserve band 8. your work is admirable for those aspiring band 7 like me.