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z1z1z1z1

Oct 9, 2012

Speeches / Food dislike - correct my paragraph [4]

jojorashedThreads: 1
Posts: 1 Today, 08:47am #1

Hi there
In my opinion, I see some grammatical errors but more importantly you'd better write your paragraph with more organized logic.
I think given evidence isn't supporting your statement well. And you repeat 'there is/there are, foods I don't like, foods I like' too much.

Hopefully my suggestion will help you.
Cheers!

My suggestion :
Which foods do children hate? What foods do adults dislike? Why do you think that food preferences change as you get older?
There are many diffrent kinds of foods in the world, but some are loved and others aren't. From my point of view, food prefrences change as we get older.

For example, when I was a child I didn't like tomatoes and red meat. Getting older, I didn't like seafoods too. When we were children we're not good at recognize diffrent tastes of foods. However, now that we are adults we can easily realize the tastes by accumulated experiences.

z1z1z1z1

Oct 9, 2012

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK2 Pros and cons of building nuclear power plants [4]

Hi I'm preparing IELTs to get band score 7.0 and want to know grammatical and logical problems in my essay.
I'm waiting for your opinions. Thanks in advance! =]

Recently issues in relation to building nuclear power plants have been much more controversial since the accident in Fukusima last year. There are diffrent points of views about the effectivess of nuclear power but this essay will introduce both pros and cons by contrasting and comparing.

Those who are in favour of using nuclear power insist that nothing is more efficient than nuclear energy. The cost in demand to generate electrocity is cheaper than any other plants using either fossil fuel or water power.

On the contrary, people who disagree with nuclear power believe that it results in spending far more money in the long run. According to them, we chould take account into the high cost to build a plant and the compesation cost in case of the accident.

Meanwhile, it is necessary to consider what impact driven by new clear power on the environment. Some poeple argue that uranium, which is a main resource of nuclear generates less CO2 compared to fossil resources. Therefore it is helpful to keep the global warming effect from expanding. However, others are skeptical that this arguement can outweigh the danger from radioactive rays and wastes generated during nuclear power planting. As it's clearly seen in Fukusima and Chernobyl, the damages from exposure to radioactive rays were staggering and demand considerable long time to recover.

In summary, nuclear power has pros and cons together hence we should be aware of its risk frist then take advantage of benefits.