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Posts by Jane123
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Jane123   
Oct 16, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Successful dancer's performance' - NYU supplement "what intrigues you" [2]

the prompt is:What intrigues you? Tell us about one work of art, scientific achievement, piece of literature, method of communication, or place in the world (a film, book, performance, website, event, location, etc.), and explain its significance to you.

Honestly, is my essay silly??
The peacock dance has intrigued me for the first sight since I was five years old. To give a general view of the peacock dance, it is a popular traditional Chinese dancing style derived from the Dai minority. It features a feeling of graceful and tame. I was first attracted by the peacock dance and decided to learn simply because of the dazzling long broad skirts decorated with peacock feathers. However, after a few years of practice, I have discovered that the dance itself is a work of art, combining strong disciplines with free expression. In other words, I have to follow a fixed performing order while dancing but I could add flexible eye expression and free body motions. Only by balance well between disciplines and creation can a dancer produce a successful performance and the same rule can be applied to life. Under the test-oriented education for 17 years, I have developed a solid foundation of knowledge and a rigorous way of thinking and I am to explore more creative thinking in America in NYU to balance myself in my "peacock dance".
Jane123   
Oct 17, 2012
Undergraduate / Dramatic tales, Storyteller-- NYU SUPPLEMENT [2]

i feel like you are telling too little about urself. so maybe the ending seems a little bit abrupt.
yes, telling story has always been part of our society but tell more about how does this history/ culture has any influence on u
the admission officer want to see who you are.
good luck:) it would definately be a great essay!
Jane123   
Oct 21, 2012
Undergraduate / 'not gone to Stern' - NYU Admission [3]

it's really a lot like a personal statement. this essay asks you to write something about ur academic plan. besides showing ur passion for NYU, for Stern, you should also indicate what u r good at? why business intrigued u? or what majors are u planning to take in NYU.

humble views, good luck!
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