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Nov 9, 2012
Undergraduate / "Do you have chocolate?" College App Work Experience Essay [4]

It was the seventh door of the night. I still hadn't sold any and the ice cream was starting to melt. My

time was running out.

I rang the doorbell and put on a brave face. "Hello I'm Si Yuan. Would you like to have some
delightful Evergreen ice cream?" Simple, short and sweet. I have rehearsed this six times earlier.
This will be my lucky number seven.

My façade vaporized as the door swung open and a heavily tattooed grizzly of a man appeared
with a grimace. I stole an apprehensive glance at my icebox; the laws of thermodynamics were not
reversing anytime soon.

With a quavering voice and uneasy smile I rushed through my pitch. There was no way anyone could
have bought into that! With a pounding heart I waited for the eventual-

"Do you have chocolate?"

My ice cream continues to melt as I ring the doorbell, showing you what I have in my icebox and
anticipate an acceptance letter in March.

Cheerios :)
Revisiter   
Nov 13, 2012
Undergraduate / "Do you have chocolate?" College App Work Experience Essay [4]

Hello, this was supposed to be the 1000 characters Describe your extracurricular activity or a work experience essay.

I was trying to draw parellels between one of my work experiences and the current college application process..

Thanks for the feedback so far!
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