thenabforlife
Nov 18, 2012
Undergraduate / 'Red track and white lines simplify my world. I love running'. Admission Essay [4]
Sorry for the double post but I can't seem to edit my first post for some reason.
A couple things I missed were you could change running across the finish line to crossing the finish line.
Also, in the last paragraph, my limits or beyond could be changed to my limits and beyond or you could also take the beyond part out and just keep limits. Finally, To never be afraid of facing challenges should not have a comma after it.
Sorry for the double post but I can't seem to edit my first post for some reason.
A couple things I missed were you could change running across the finish line to crossing the finish line.
Also, in the last paragraph, my limits or beyond could be changed to my limits and beyond or you could also take the beyond part out and just keep limits. Finally, To never be afraid of facing challenges should not have a comma after it.