Posts by Albert
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How to start an essay "why do people attend college or university?" [7]
'Interest through a friend' - Drake University Supplement EssayDescribe how you first came to be interested in attending Drake University? [300 characters]I first became interested in Drake University through a friend who had earlier applied. He was optimistic about getting into Drake but unfortunately couldn't enroll due to insufficient funds. He constantly passed positive comments about Drake and this heightened my interest in Drake.
Please help.
Undergraduate /
'the gravity of challenges' - Bentley University Supplement Essay [5]
If you could change one thing about your high school career, what would it be?If I could change something about my high school career, it would be the GCE A'level subjects I studied: Mathematics,Economics & Business Studies. I'm very passionate about each of these subjects because of their appeal and application in my everyday routines. I employ them so often that they have become part and parcel of me, meanwhile, I like challenges. Repetition wears off the gravity of challenges. I would therefore want to study more challenging subjects such as Physics, Chemistry and Further Mathematics. These subjects would demand more from me and therefore push me to my capacity and stimulate my inner genius to surface. Also, it was my childhood dream to become a scientist like my name sake 'Albert' Einstein. These GCE A'level subjects would have made my childhood dream a reality.
Please help edit this essay. Thank you.
Undergraduate /
Academic interests/ What intrigues you?: NYU Supplements! [4]
In the second part:
Google, Netflix, Facebook, music, emails, CNN, and The Common App too
^this isn't a complete sentence and therefore it is not grammatically correct. Secondly, music and emails are not websites. So you might have to correct that. But it's a pretty good essay, the best I've seen so far. I'm also applying to NYUAD so goodluck with your application.
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