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Posts by Hourea
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Dec 7, 2012
Undergraduate / I represented my school at Physics Olympiad- university entrance essay [3]

I don't want to seem harsh but truthfully, I think the general tone is a bit redundant. There is a redundancy in the use of the word "olympiad", try replacing it from time to time by the words: challenge, experience ..

Example: Some days before this year's Science Olympiad, my teacher told me that I'll be sent as my school's representative for this year's edition.

Also, I would also avoid writing the negative part about how you thought physics was really boring because it contradicts the whole purpose of your answer and shows you are not passionate enough about it!
Hourea   
Dec 7, 2012
Undergraduate / The reasons for transfer; Statement - 'I did an internship at the Salon Du Dessin' [NEW]

During my freshman year, I did an internship at the Salon Du Dessin. The Salon Du Dessin is an old drawing art fair that assembles some of the world's finest art galleries and I enjoyed every minute I spent working there. More importantly, this experience opened my eyes to what really interests me in the art world. While meeting interesting people from all around the world and working with experts who were passionate about the arts, I became fascinated with their depth of knowledge in their selected field. By the end of my second semester, I realized that my school provided me with the tools to be an excellent art mediator, but unfortunately wouldn't provide me with the knowledge to become an art expert.

My studies at the Icart have prepared me with a broad knowledge of art history, art criticism and a specialized inquiry into the art market at present times. Thus, developing an interdisciplinary outlook on the world of arts with an emphasis on French cultural institutions.

At the Icart, I am majoring in arts communication and administration. The Icart offers a professionalizing program that aims to directly immerse the students into the professional world. With internships representing more than 70% of our timetables, the program is almost entirely career oriented.

By attending your university, I would like to prioritize an education in art history and indulge in an enriching multicultural environment. Eventually I would like to focus on my career goals in graduate school.

My motives for transferring are as much academic as they are cultural. I would like to challenge myself to a higher and more specialized level of education; and wish to do so in my native language, surrounded by people from different countries and cultures. Although Paris is an international city, the community at the Icart is mostly French and does not offer as much as a diverse cultural environment as I'd like to learn in. Having been born into a bilingual family, raised in different countries, and educated in an American school have exposed me to different cultures and peoples. I've cultivated a desire to step outside my comfort zone, broaden my horizons, and discover new opportunities

I know I would thrive in an international community and your strong academic program would aid me in reaching my professional goals and possibly transcending my greatest ambitions. My secondary school transcripts show I have done well in the American system and my studies in the French system of higher education show my taste for challenge. I truly wish you will grant me the privilege to prove myself at your university.
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