Undergraduate / NYU SUPP- WHY NYU? It's the most convenient location/ friendly faces [3]

I'm applying to NYU and just need someone to edit one of my supplements. Basically, I just want someone to tear it apaprt and tell me what's good and bad. The question is: Tell us why you have chosen the above campus (using a maximum of 700 characters-spaces and punctuation included).

I chose the NYU New York Campus, and here is my essay:

From the moment I stepped onto the NYU New York Campus, I realized that New York is a city that will never fail to make me feel as if I belong. The vibrant NYU New York campus is filled with friendly faces from all over the world which will help me build friendships that will last a lifetime and allow me to understand life through different cultures. By staying in New York, I would be able to experience cultural diversity, while being only a couple hours away from my home and family. I would love to experience the rush and energy of living in a city. The NYU New York campus is the most convenient location for me, and I would take all opportunities to have the ideal undergraduate experience.

THANKS SO MUCH!! :)

Undergraduate / Grilled Cheese; UNC Chapel Hill- My comfort food [3]

I'm not quite done with this! The deadline is tonight, and I know that it ismy fault for procrastinating, but I would really appreciate ANY feedback! The prompt is:

What is your comfort food and why?

From my early childhood, if I remember one thing correctly, it is that I have always been a very picky eater. The one food that I fell in love with instantly, however, is the grilled cheese sandwich. It looks like a simple meal that takes just minutes to make which is completely true, but the taste is just so original. I love everything about the sandwich, from the sizzling of the buttered bread as soon as it is placed onto the pan, to the crunchiness of the toasted bread, to the warm cheese dripping from the sides, to the delicious aroma that it leaves in the house.

A grilled cheese sandwich easily became my comfort food not only because I love the taste of it, but also because it brings back many memories. As I was growing up, there were many times when I stayed home alone with my older brother. We would often fight over the littlest things such as whose choice of television show we would watch on the projector in our basement or who would get to eat the last cherry popsicle left in the fridge. But when it came time for lunch, we would happily sit in our dining room eating a delightful grilled cheese sandwich. At that point, nothing else really mattered. We would focus on eating our sandwiches and laughing until our stomachs hurt. Now, whenever I eat a grilled cheese sandwich, those small memories come rushing back to me. I can see a younger version of my brother sitting right across from me chuckling and telling the silliest jokes which still never fail to make me laugh to this day.

I'LL CONTINUE ADDING MORE AS I CONTINUE WRITING. THANK YOU :)