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Posts by jessmaguana
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jessmaguana   
Dec 21, 2012
Undergraduate / Syracuse supp/ Who & what influenced?/ Dream person & Syracuse / Work experience [6]

Syracuse
1. Who or what influenced you to apply to Syracuse University?

The ones who influence me to apply to college, in general, are my parents. They make me see how life is hard when you don't have an education to back you up. Wanting me to be different, they help me pursue my dreams to go to college. But what influences me to apply to Syracuse University? The fact that their diversity may not be the most balanced, but that they have centers to bring them all close together, each ethnicity with ethnicity. Like "La Casita Cultural Center" where they seek to bring the latinos all together. Me being a latina, i find this essential since growing up with latinos, I'll get home sick and i could just go to this center and feel like i am in my neighborhood again.

2. Who is the person you dream of becoming and how do you believe Syracuse University can help you achieve this?

I have always been the one to play it safe. People called me boring because I didn't want to go on the new rollercoaster at Coney Island or go to the midnight premiere of a movie at Times Square. I could've but i over thought it too much and backed out. Better safe than sorry, right? Well, i want to change that. I want to become someone who isn't afraid, that has the guts to do whatever she wants without double thinking it. Like trying some new exotic foods or traveling somewhere no one will ever think I could go. I want memories that will know that i lived a life where i know i didn't make a waste of my life.

3. If you have had work experience what skills and/or knowledge did you gain?

The only job experience that i have done is babysitting, with no pay. My dad has never wanted me to work an official job, he has always wanted me to just focus on my school work. I appreciate it alot because school can be very stressful as it is, and with work, i think i would have gained grey hairs already. Even though babysitting may seem simple and an easy task, it can be pretty handy. But I have gained important skills while babysitting. Multi-tasking became my new best friend. When you have a project due the next day, and you're stuck babysitting the night before with a baby girl who doesn't be quiet unless you have her in your arms, it can get pretty crazy. But i learned to have it all under control and do what i have to do.
jessmaguana   
Dec 22, 2012
Undergraduate / Syracuse supp/ Who & what influenced?/ Dream person & Syracuse / Work experience [6]

This is the new edited one, do ya think its okay?

My dad has always played a strong role in my academic dreams guiding me in the right path and backing me endlessly. Syracuse is one of his choices for me where he thinks I'd find the right fit. When I first heard of Syracuse, I didn't exactly think eye to eye with my father. But with time, after researching, I found myself fascinated with it. As most students do, they look for their possible major within the school. Me, being an undecided student, I looked for anything intriguing. Then BOOM! i came upon it. I saw 'The Student Organization List'. From then, I seeked something in particular. A organization that dealt with Hispanics. Me being an hispanic i want to be able to go somewhere that i can interact with my ethnicity. LaLucha and Colores caught my attention, since not only did they not bring Hispanics together but they bring unifying changes within the community of Syracuse. I have always been to always lend a helping hand when its needed. In my community, I am a proud volunteer. So to be able to take part in the community of Syracuse, makes me see how its a right fit for me.
jessmaguana   
Jan 26, 2013
Writing Feedback / Advertisement encourages to buy in bulk, whereas it should promote high quality of the products sold [5]

"about the latest products..."
"but it should promote the quality of the product which is being sold."

"advertisment(s) show ... feature(s) ... comsumer(s)

"For instance, the Pepsodent tooth paste advertisement show that it will relieve people from tooth sensitiveness which make people try the toothpaste which result in more sale of Pepsodent tooth paste"

"In addition, the advertisers use celebrity figures to endorse the product. To illustrate, In India, the famous cricketer Sachin Tendulkar endorses "boost" health drink and says "Boost is the secret of my energy". This advertisement makes cricket fans buy more boost product and result in high rise in sale of the product."

In a nutshell, advertisements motivate people to buy more product rather than improving the quality of the product. The advertiser has to take extra care in the quality of the product. The quality and additional benefits should be added to the advertisement so that the results benefit to both high profit for the advertisers and also to the society.
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