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jasonmuraira   
Feb 10, 2009
Writing Feedback / Living a simple but meaningful life is a lifestyle which you must choose. [7]

The assignment is to write a five page essay on a subject related to the book Affluenza which discusses consumer soiety and the problems they create: mainly how people look for satisfaction in material things and are always wanting more. However it also discusses many different aspects of today's giaint consumer economy. My goal with this essay was to both address the subject and provide a possable remidy. ITs do tommorw and any feedback would be most helpful. Thanks!

Living a simple but meaningful life is a lifestyle which you must choose to want to have. We must be able to make the choices in life that make our lives relatively simple and more meaningful I strongly believe that what must of us each wants and needs most deeply is health, loving relationships, personal wisdom, meaning, and some sort of career or direction that is fulfilling. By simple, I do not mean stagnant or idle, far from it. I mean living up to our full potential and reaching to our creative peaks.

Have we ever truly asked ourselves what is the purpose of my life? Or, what do I want to do in life? I strongly believe that if we truly ask ourselves these questions, and are honest with ourselves, then we begin to live a more simple life and make more meaningful choices. We live in a culture that strongly judges us and rewards us based on our accomplishments, wealth, social standing, looks, and the opinions we hold. But are these opinions our own? Are these accomplishments that we strive to make, made so because we really wanted to or because society told us we needed to? Is our social standing the way it is because it's the one we created or the one we inherited? Our society does not richly reward, nor hold to highly the lifestyle that says "no" to many of the choices it presents; nor, does like to break from tradition. But are our traditions and our uncritical acceptance part of the problem?

Taking a look around while traveling through one of our modern cites, observing the names of the stores, the products they distribute, the way they advertise, and the purpose they serve, its not to difficult for one to see how each one thrives on the other and competes for your attention and business. It's not hard to see that a city most often is just a big advertising center and gigantic consumer center. It's not hard to see that we live in a consumer wasteland. There are so many choices out there! Our society is like a gigantic Toys R' Us except these toys can kill you, make you addicted, cause wars, harm the planet, make us and those around us miserable, and make us distrust each other. Not only are corporations and business competing for our attention and money but consumers are competing with each other to get the latest commodity. Sound like a paradox? The government wants us to join its economic crusade and enlist in the military; where they train us how to follow orders and sacrifice our humanity for duty, sacrifice our thinking for theirs, give away our freedom for their freedom. Every TV and radio station wants us to spend our leisure time with them instead of with ourselves, our family, our neighbors, and our friends. The banks and credit card companies want to give you all the debt they can so you can go out and participate in the consumer wasteland. What it boils down to is that we need to be professional choice makers today so as to not be turned into socially conditioned consuming automations. It's all a matter of choice. How do we want to live our lives?

Let's take at good look at this array of choices we are presented with. Today we have an unprecedented number of choices-we are all fit to be kings and queens. We have a incredibly vast array of career paths to choose from. There are careers in the arts, the medical industry, politics and government, business and self-employment, education, entertainment, technology. So many fields and so many choices! So what is stopping us from finding one that is just right for us? We have any spiritual tradition on earth to follow if we choose to. We have instant access to much of the world's information: and it's nearly free. We are presented with a multitude of choices regarding the foods we eat. We have food available from all around the world and the best our earth has to offer. So, what is stopping us from choosing foods that are both healthy for us and are also friendly to our environment? We have arts and crafts of every kind available.. We have the opportunity to become who ever we want to be if we allow ourselves the freedom to do so. We are the most spoiled civilization in the history of our race. With so many choices available why do so many people make unhealthy and dissatisfying ones? What's stopping us from emerging out of this labyrinth of choices smarter, happier, healthier, more alive, more humble and appreciative then generations of the past and other cultures in the present? With so many choices available why do so many people make unhealthy and dissatisfying ones? I believe it's a matter of making or not making simple and meaningful choices. We have the opportunity to become who ever we want to be; of course, only as long as we are not harming others and the planet.

How do we, with so many choices, find a path through this labyrinth that works for us and makes us grow? The first thing we need to do is give ourselves the freedom to become anything we could ever dream of being. This society offers us a lot that does not require nor deserve our attention and concern; nor should we be so susceptible to everything that is floating around in the media, in books, or in other people's heads. What is required is a conscious effort to say "no" to much of what society offers us: unhealthy foods which have long been accepted as normal eating standards: unhealthy jobs that make us miserable and do more harm to our bodies, mind, and planet than they do good; unhealthy entertainment that distorts our thoughts and leaves negative impressions of how we view each other and the world around us. We need to make dreams even if they are just fantasies: they still portray something about us and who we want to be and what we want to do. We need to make dreams that are our own and not something the television, family members, friends, or school systems told us we should dream/. We all have talents. We all have incredible potential and imaginations. Let's use them to create the life we always wanted and make the world a better place by doing so.

So how do we live a meaningful life? First off we need good health to be able to accomplish any career path we wish to travel; so choosing healthy foods and proper exercise appear to be necessities. Our bodies do not need much of the food our society offers. Second our minds can do without much the news and entertainment. They certainly do not make us happier, smarter, healthier, or more creative. Third, we need dreams and personal goals and aspirations that are deeply personal as well as lifelong ambitions. This creates our holy grail, our personal muse. Fourth we need a comfortable place to live. We are very fortunate to have so many choices where to live and be sheltered. However, living and associating with people who drag us down, have unhealthy lifestyles, and hold jobs that make them miserable is an environment in which we either chose to stay in or leave. As social beings we have a huge effect on each other, more so then we are really aware of. And the people we live with and associate with are no exception. One person's problems can be made into another's; similarly, one person's simple and healthy life style can just as easily rub off on others.

After we have food, shelter, media influence and aspirations under control we need to focus on personal growth. We need to develop a lifestyle that nurtures our passions, personal growth, health, and creativity. The next task should be abstaining adequate transportation and telecommunications. In our culture these are pretty essential while developing a career and lifestyle that fuels you ambitions. They offer opportunity, mobility, and flexibility. These can either be used carelessly and destructively, or they can be seen as tools to help us live a simple and meaningful life. The fact that we don't have to wait for days or travel long distance to communicate with our friends, family, and other associates is a wonderful accomplishment and should be appreciated not taken for granted. Transportation is necessary and should also be appreciated. However, crucial changes need to be implemented in the way we go about traveling. if we want to live healthy and in an environment that is too; we can't have one without the other. It's a wonderful luxury to be able to get from place to place so rapidly. So we have addressed what it takes to live healthy, comfortable, inspired, and mobile in our society.

Most of us want meaning and purpose in our lives; we want to contribute to the world in some way. And this means in one way or another operating with or within our society. This choice is no less important than the food we choose to fuel ourselves with. Now we must face the hardest challenge of our modern day culture: finding out what it is we want to do in our labyrinth of choice; what path is going to lead us to our holy grail. Do we want to help others, create art, teach, start a business, work in government, contribute to the advancements of science and technology, or work in the entertainment industry? We have so many choices! However like children in Toys R' Us we are unable to be satisfied with one toy and quickly move on to the next. But unlike children we have the benefit of our experienced years and what really ignites our passions. Unlike children we have been exposed to the world's injustices, tragedies, and the monstrous creature that is our society. We have experienced life's ups and downs and have some vague idea of what it means to be human. But most important we have learned that we have a choice. We know in our hearts and in our soul that a life with meaning and purpose can be lived. So, what do we want to do in life? How do we want to contribute to the world in our life. How can we live simply and healthy with ourselves, society, and our environment?

Simple, huh? Simple is not easy, especially in today's culture. There is a lot of obstacles and weight that comes with choosing to live a simple and meaningful life. Simple, means making decisions that help us become who we want to be. Simple, means choosing foods because there good for us, not because they taste good. Simple, means creating your our own dreams and ambitions because no one else can create the path we really want to travel. Simple means appreciating modern technology such as the internet, communications, and transportation for how much simpler they make our lives. Simple, means being honest with ourselves and honest to what we really want to do in life: no matter what anybody says.

Meaning? That's for each of us to decide alone. What do you want to do in life? How do you want to contribute to the world? What is the purpose of your life? What do you want the purpose of you life to be? It's your choice and there are many to choose from. Choose well and reach for your peak!
jasonmuraira   
Feb 11, 2009
Writing Feedback / Essay: Who is more important in the family? Mother or Father? [7]

Overall is sounds good. It makes sense and presents your ideas well. A couple of sugestions I belive might help to illistrate your essay. Just a few examples would help articulate the points. Some developmental psyhcology findings might help confirm these patterns you decribed. However, you did fine decribing them. Also, in your conclusion it isnt necessary to state that you came to a conclusion; you can just state your conclusion. Well done and very easy to follow.
jasonmuraira   
Feb 11, 2009
Student Talk / How to improve English writing? Learning through reading. [130]

Start with the basics. Build a foundation so that you can gradually progress by reading and conversing. Learn and memorize the alphabet. Learn the syllables. Learn the very basics of English. Establish those and then continue to expand. Learn how to sound the words in a dictionary out and read it often, write the words and definitions out; learning more and more as you expand. It may help to read children's books. But most of all try and identify the patterns. If you can catch the patterns early on then you can see how they just expand in the same pattern to encompass more and analyze further and further.
jasonmuraira   
Feb 12, 2009
Writing Feedback / Living a simple but meaningful life is a lifestyle which you must choose. [7]

Thank you. I did make many revisons and changed the thesis around. I restrcured the essay and narrowed my fucus. I decided I will save this version and use some it's themes in different essays. Your advise, though harsh, helped greatly and I thank you for spending time to help me.

The essay is something I'm still working on understanding. I write from the heart and tend to exspress my ideas and emotions: this comes exstreamly natural and easy. I haven't really cought on to the whole argument thing; I don't, in my writing try to prove anything, but rather to explore, muse, ponder, enlighten and most of all problem solve. So I've been trying to find away to bring this style into the essay realm. I know it can be done, and has been, and that it's just a matter of undersanding and practice. Again, thank you.
jasonmuraira   
Aug 8, 2009
Essays / Are established rules too limited to guide people in real-life situations? [4]

Well, your task is to determine whether established rules are too limited to guide people in real-life situations. The first thing you need to consider is how you feel about established rules; are there too many; are they too limited; are they not able to govern real-life situations (for example a speed limit of 60 is obviously ungovernable because people are going to drive at speeds, maneuver around each other, slow down for traffic, etc. So your task here should be to consider your opinion on "established rules" and how you think they work (limit) in real life situations. Do they or don't they? Do some work better then others? Explore the topic and write a good essay. Good luck!
jasonmuraira   
Aug 8, 2009
Grammar, Usage / The difference between: can/could, may/might, will/would, that/which [5]

"Can" is definite: He "can" go to school. Whereas "could" is only a possibility: He "could" go to school.

They are both model verbs indicating that something may/might happen. "May" is a possibility indicating that something could happen: May we go to school. But "may" can also be used to affirm something: You may go to school. "May" can be used in a few other ways too. Whereas "might," also similar, has different sub-uses: With considerable might he picked up the school house. It can also be used as a possibility: might we go to school; or, we might go to school. It can also be used to indicate that somebody should have done something: You might have told me he picked up the school.

Sorry I don't have time to answer the other two. I'll check back later to make sure somebody else answered them all.
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