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Posts by carolynxpark
Joined: Dec 24, 2012
Last Post: Jan 4, 2013
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carolynxpark   
Dec 24, 2012
Undergraduate / New York never sleeps; NYU Supp/ Why NYU [7]

New York City: the city that never sleeps. The city is so vibrant and brimming with places to visit and people to see that the possibilities are endless. NYU New York is unique in that the city itself is a part of the campus. NYU is a haven for wanderers like me who don't like to be boxed in and be limited to small surroundings. The vastness of the city allows me to experience and explore something different each day. Because New York is so culturally rich, I can encounter various cultures through the different ethnic communities. From India, Ireland, Italy, China, Russia, Puerto Rico, and many other countries, I can become more enlightened about the rest of the world without ever leaving the city.
carolynxpark   
Dec 27, 2012
Undergraduate / New York never sleeps; NYU Supp/ Why NYU [7]

the prompt is: Tell us why you have chosen the above campus (using a maximum of 700 characters-spaces and punctuation included).
It's not a supplement, just a short answer to why I chose NYU NY instead of Shanghai or Abu Dhabi
carolynxpark   
Jan 4, 2013
Undergraduate / Jesus's words & actions/ My strengths & weaknesses/ Canisius College - Type of LEADER [3]

There's a parallel problem here:

The answers from the class were obvious; a leader needs to show empathy, honesty, trustworthy , unselfishness, teamwork etc.

trustworthy is an adjective while all the other words are nouns. You should change it to trustworthiness or another word to make the sentence parallel.

Pronoun problem here:
but we lacked the ability to become an excellent leader.

There is more than one person referred here. Therefore, it should be "become leaders"

Jesus showed his love and compassion towards everyone, regardless of what they hav e done.

should be had

I really like how you used Jesus as your role model, but connected it to a more personal level than the generic way.
Good job.
carolynxpark   
Jan 4, 2013
Undergraduate / Programming languages & robots; Purdue U; Personal/professional goals [2]

I have taken computer science beyond school, I have taken courses outside, I have made my own software and also took to programming robots, I have participated in several robotics competitions.

This sounds like a run-on to me

normal classes

maybe replace normal with traditional instead?

Everything else sounds okay. Good luck !
carolynxpark   
Jan 4, 2013
Undergraduate / Cultural barriers/ Forming friendships; LOYOLA MARYMOUNT/ Critical Thinking [4]

QUESTION 2: Critical thinking is a central goal of Jesuit education, and at LMU you'll be asked to think critically and intensively in every class. Dr. King suggests that critical thinking results in our ability to inform intelligence with character, and strengthen character with intelligence. Please talk about a situation that demanded critical thinking from you, and how your choices or decisions integrated intelligence and character.

DOES THIS ANSWER THE PROMPT?

I was lost in a foreign country for two weeks. No, not physically lost. Culturally lost. This past summer, I had the opportunity to work at a university hospital in Seoul, South Korea putting together medication for patients, distributing the medication, translating pamphlets, and guiding foreign patients throughout the hospital.

As a second-generation, first-born daughter of South Korean immigrants, my job has always been to translate, pay the bills, and perform any duty required of me, the mediator of two completely different cultures. Through this responsibility, I acquired the proficiency in two languages: Korean and English. Because of my bilingual skill set, I believed that volunteering at Konkuk University Hospital would be a breeze.

What I didn't realize was that, despite my fluency in Korean and having been raised by traditionally Korean parents, there were stark cultural differences: cultural practices that as a Korean American I wouldn't know. For instance, I wasn't aware that it is expected of workers to wait until all the seniors had left before we could leave. I also wasn't aware that even though my work schedule technically ended at 3 p.m., I couldn't and shouldn't leave until everyone else had finished with his or her work. If I completed my work on time, it was polite to offer my assistance to others. I simply acted as I would have in the United States. There was an evident lack of communication between the workers and me that led to multiple misunderstandings. However, I thought they would understand. I mean after all, I was a foreigner.

Eventually, I realized that I was disappointing a lot of people-especially myself. I knew my potential and I wasn't living up to it. Despite my unfamiliarity with the different traditions, I needed to step outside of my comfort zone to improve my performance. I couldn't simply give a hundred percent; I needed to contribute more. As they say, "When in Rome, do as the Romans do."

Eventually, I broke through the cultural barriers that I initially didn't even know existed. I formed friendships with some of the workers, some many years older than myself. To be fair, I wasn't the only one who adjusted to the cultural differences. The people I interacted with also accepted me, understanding that the world I came from was different from theirs. I also understood that they weren't used to working with teenagers from a country so many miles away. Many of us have limited awareness of the cultural barriers that are dissolving more and more each day. We should take it upon ourselves to increase our awareness that there is a fine line. None of us all are always right, and it is of the utmost importance to simply acknowledge intercultural values. By acknowledging them, we can eliminate some of the obstacles that hinder us from moving forward.

I'm proud to say that at the end of my internship, working at the hospital taught me not only medical information I will find valuable in pursuing a Psychology degree, but also the importance of open-mindedness and a willingness to step outside of my comfort zones. Through understanding the Korean traditions and values, my internship experience was both rewarding and productive. This summer, I was faced with the unexpected that took me off guard. Regardless, I was able to move past the obstacles that hindered me from reaching my potential. I was able to look past the culture shock that at first made me feel stranded and inadequate. In the end, I realized that I wasn't stranded. By appreciating the culture, I successfully performed my responsibilities and genuinely felt like a member of the community.
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