Undergraduate / 'Use of fear' - University Application Essay - Significant Challenge [4]

"I became uncertain with whether or not I wanted to continue through."

how about "uncertainty loomed"

good luck

Undergraduate / Biochemistry/ Molecular Biology/French/History/Art/Architecture; BrownPLME- My FIELDS [3]

"The topics they least understood were an incentive for me to grasp them better."

weirdly worded.

"Ever since I was a child, I was bewitched"
bewitch?

Overall, a very concise essay!
Please help me revise my Harvey Mudd Supplement!