Undergraduate / Nanyang: My proudest achievement essay. [9]

i suggest u change the openin lines.. its very well written though.. good job!!..it'll prbly be tough to shorten it... nothin rlly seems insignificant.. nd word limit for nanyang essays is 300 words not 250.. i know that coz im writin on the same topic too...

Undergraduate / Nanyang: My proudest achievement essay. [9]

i thin u can still reword the beginning to make it more interesting.. another thing i didn understand was the end.. u say "Now i realize".. i mean wasnt this match played 4 years ago???. other than that i think it looks pretty good.. although, i admit, im not too good at essays so u should prbly jst wait for the moderators to reply...

Writing Feedback / Proudest achievement of my life-linear generator buoy [3]

pretty impressive essay... specially ur ideas.. overall i don thin dis essay requires much of changes.. i agree wid kevin though... good job done!!..