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Feb 27, 2013
Undergraduate / "Knowing oneself is the beginning of all wisdom"; Significant experiences [5]

Hey this is an essay for a summer program. I feel this essay is really sub-par. I've never had to write about myself and my experiences...

PROMPT: What are the significant experiences or accomplishments you have realized that have helped define you as a person?

Everyday at school, students learn about world history, mathematics, and chemistry - to name a few. While teachers spend countless hours going over the Pythagorean theorem, students are never given the opportunity to learn about themselves.

Aristotle said, "Knowing oneself is the beginning of all wisdom." It's true this lesson of self-discovery cannot be taught within the parameters of a classroom; but it can be revealed through self-reflection.

At the Rotary Youth Leadership Awards, I learned about my personality type and how I can more effectively lead others in my community. This event prompted me to question just how we are supposed to use our leadership ability.

Then I attended Kairos. Kairos - a Catholic retreat program - provided perspective on many of the open-ended questions I needed answers to. Given more time to self-reflect, I became aware of my purpose for existence. Kairos inspired me to follow the Christian ideal of "being a person for others."

These experiences confirmed that my actions against the world's injustices through Amnesty International and Rotary Interact are only the beginning steps towards the right direction. These experiences have assisted me in issues where I must choose between what is right and what is easy. Both events provoked more questions about the world and my place in it. And while my answers are not nearly complete... I have a lifetime to contemplate and satisfy these questions.
scisslehannd   
Feb 28, 2013
Undergraduate / "Knowing oneself is the beginning of all wisdom"; Significant experiences [5]

Thanks guys for all the great feedback!! I took into consideration your views. I changed the intro around a little. I really tried to elaborate on how I learned about my personality. Unfortunately, this essay has a max of 250 words. So, I was extremely limited in what I could add!! But I did get rid of the intro so those extra words could be used on my personality. Thanks overall! Really helpful!!!!
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