Writing Feedback / TOEFL; Reasons why travelers visit Museums?To know about CULTURE, TRADITION & HISTORY [3]

QUESTION: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Many people like to visit museums when they travel to new places, other people don't like to visit museums. I personaly tend to visit museums when I'm in a new place because it's good for me know about the culture, tradition and history of other places.

The first reason why people are willing to visit museums when they travel to a new territory is that museums provide a tremendous amount of information about different aspects of the history and culture of that place, as I said back. And also taking the chance for making friends. Visit museums can bring you the opportunity to establish relations and knowledge to participate in conversations. And that kind of knowledge speaks very highly of you.

However, other people visit museums are the most boring expirience of a trip. My cousin Pedro literaly hates to visit museums but he really enjoyed his visit to the famous London - Madame Tussaud museum, it was kind of art entertainment but also that visit helped him to understand the artist works, and in addition he started to respect and admire other types of arts that offers in other museums.

In coclusion, the museums are a visual source to know the history, tradition and culture of any place in the world. I think it's fun and educational.

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Writing Feedback / Toefl - Classmates are more influential than parents on a child's success in school [2]

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child's success in school.

In general, most people tend to believe that parents are the most influential in children and certainly they are sometimes right, because children spend more time with their parents than their classmates.

In my opinion, classmates encourage some attitudes and sometimes help a child to define his/her character. For instance, when I was sophomore high school student, I really did not like chemestry. So I was reluctant to work on this subject. Also some of my classmates hated this subject. My best friend Juan did not understand nothing about chemestry, but he really tried to understand it. He was always searching on Internet or asking to the teacher or doing extra homework. He didn't get the best score in chemestry but he really motivate me to never gave up to understand and study hardly. Moreover, classmates affect children more than parents.

However, parents are always there for their children, being supportive, trying to guide and protecting. Parents may give a lot of advices based on their experiences, which give more credibility than a classmate.

In summary, parents and classmates are both important for every children in education.

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