Scholarship / The final input came from my brother-in-law, cardiologist - why did you choose this career? [8]

Hi Everyone! I cannot believe that I found this website or that it even exists. Great job!

I am applying for a scholarship that is very important to me and is not based on financial need. So the essay is a make-or-break deal. One of the questions is:

"Why did you choose sonography as a career?" in 250 words or less.
This is what I wrote:

"I arrived in the United Stated in August of 2005. In my country, Romania, I was studying economics-information systems to my father's desire. Arrived here I finally felt like the choice of my own career belonged to me. Health-care was my passion and the opportunity had finally arrived for me to make my own decision.

My first job in the United Stated was as an Anesthesia technician at Brackenridge/Children Hospital of Austin, job that gave me ample opportunity to research and observe the majority of health-care careers. It was the job that validated that being a health-care professional was who I was, but I still needed to decide which one was the right one. In my search for my future career I received input from every health-care professionals that I ever met about the positives and draw-backs of their own career.

The final input came from my brother-in-law, cardiologist, that introduced me to the field of echocardiography. He showed me echo pictures and attempted to explain what they represented and what they meant. I remember very distinctly that I had no idea what he was talking about since I barely knew any human anatomy, let alone any terms that described disease processes. That is when I knew that I too wanted to know what he knows. Words like "diastolic dysfunction" and "dilated cardiomyopathy" are no longer foreign to me, and I could not be happier. "

There are 243 words. Any input is welcomed.

Scholarship / Contributions to the Field of Sonography [10]

Hey guys, I need more help with my scholarship essays.
Second question that I need to answer is: "What are you career goals in sonography? How do you hope to contribute to the field"

I don't have a draft yet because I'm still brainstorming on what are they looking for with this questions. Especially the second part of the question. Does the word "contribute" refers only to research? That's all I can think of that they are implying, but maybe someone has a different idea. Because if research is what they are thinking about... really, only a handful of people go into research, in any field.

The third question that I have to answer is: "why do you think you should receive this scholarship". This scholarship is NOT based on financial need, so I believe that including any financial information in my essay would not be a good idea. I have to come up with something else.

I just need some guiding into the right directions, some insights.
Thanks,
Frankie

Undergraduate / brief essay explaining your educational and career goals [7]

Hi Guys,
I have another essay that I need to turn in tomorrow, Monday by noon. I am hoping that I can get a proof reading on it. I realize that it is last moment, but the inspiration only came to me Sunday evening, even though I tried to work on it for a whole week. ACC is my community college. Since they ask for a breif essay I thought to keep it around 250 words.

The topic is: Please write a brief essay explaining your educational and career goals and how ACC will help you achieve them.

I knew very little about Sonography as a career, until I discovered it in the ACC catalog, and started researching it, close to three years ago. Since then, I have come a long way, and I am rapidly approaching my graduation in December 2009, in the Echocardiography program; yet, I realize that I am just beginning to explore a whole new world of knowledge and opportunity.

My first class at ACC was mathematics with Professor Anthony Vance. During his class, math was no longer an insurmountable obstacle, but a fun, easy-to-understand science. Being successful in my very first class at ACC (with the help of Professor Vance), has given me the necessary confidence to continue and carry on through college life. My college life at ACC has also involved being invited and joining the Phi Theta Kappa Honor Society. Being a member of Phi Theta Kappa has helped me grow as a person, develop my leadership skills, and most importantly, gave me the opportunity to meet and work with many wonderful people. I have recently become an elected officer, and I am waiting to assume my duties as the Phi Theta Kappa Vice President of Eastview Campus.

In researching the different areas of practice in echocardiography, I have discovered that I am particularly interested in pediatrics. Upon graduation, I plan to get the necessary training and become a registered pediatric echocardiographer, and with the excellent training that I am receiving in adult echocardiography at ACC, I believe the transition will be a smooth one.

ACC has helped me to become a life-long learner, both professionally and personally, which will enable me to grow and adapt to the ever changing aspects of my professional field.

Thank you guys for your time and effort,

FP