nguyenanh92
Mar 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELT TASK 1: Percentage of male and female teachers [6]
I'm a newbie here. I am studying IELTS myself so your correction and advice on my writing will be really important to me.Thank you so much!
The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of teachers divided by gender in six different educational levels in the UK in 2010. As can be seen from the chart, the two systems with the youngest age ranges of learners were dominated by women, but in the other ones, the proportions of men were equal or even more than those of women.
Nursery and primary school were two educational systems in which percentage of women was particularly high. In the aforementioned systems, female teachers made up a noticeably large proportion, which was more than 90 per cent of the total number of teachers.
The rate of female teachers tended to decrease in higher levels of education. In secondary school, college and private training institute, the proportions of men and women represented were nearly equal. The domination of men was particularly high in university, where there were twice as many men as women teachers.
Overall, the higher the level of education was, the more male teachers dominated, and the reverse occurred to female teachers
I'm a newbie here. I am studying IELTS myself so your correction and advice on my writing will be really important to me.Thank you so much!
The chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of teachers divided by gender in six different educational levels in the UK in 2010. As can be seen from the chart, the two systems with the youngest age ranges of learners were dominated by women, but in the other ones, the proportions of men were equal or even more than those of women.
Nursery and primary school were two educational systems in which percentage of women was particularly high. In the aforementioned systems, female teachers made up a noticeably large proportion, which was more than 90 per cent of the total number of teachers.
The rate of female teachers tended to decrease in higher levels of education. In secondary school, college and private training institute, the proportions of men and women represented were nearly equal. The domination of men was particularly high in university, where there were twice as many men as women teachers.
Overall, the higher the level of education was, the more male teachers dominated, and the reverse occurred to female teachers
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