Writing Feedback / Dieting can change a person's life for the better or ruin one's health completely. [4]

I am preparing for my IELTS test, so I hope some one can help me and review this essay. This is my first time to use the Essay Forum.

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Suzy Naguib

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Dieting can change a person's life for the better or ruin one's health completely. What is your opinion?

Everything has two sides, and diet is not an exception. It can replace your old boring life to a whole new healthy one, or destroy your health forever.

Obesity affects badly the bones and the muscles and causes difficulty in movement. It is also very harmful on a man's heart as the more fat you have, the more load this will be on your heart. Good moderate diet helps fat people lose the excess weight and get rid of obesity forever. Practicing more exercise and eating healthy food helps in burning unwanted fat; as a result a person can lose weight and do more effort. As for girls, they feel more self-confident as they are able to wear small sized garments thanks to diet.

On the other hand, going on a hard diet for a very long period and losing more than the normal weight, will harm the health. Some people exaggerate when going on a diet; they even stop themselves from eating any food containing fat, which may lead to their skin dryness, as well as affecting the kidney and the other body parts badly. It also leads to general weakness in the body because of losing the important vitamins and minerals that are essential for the body, during the diet. Therefore a person will not be able to do any effort and may get ill as a result of this severe diet.

In conclusion, I think that a moderate diet that includes sports in addition to healthy food will definitely help the person to lose weight within the normal standards. Eating all the food kinds with moderate amounts, will provide the person with a good health and prevent him from being weak or ill.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS Task2: Essay - The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents.. [2]

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The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is to raise age limit for the younger drivers and to lower age limit for the aged ones. Do you agree?

We must acknowledge that the number of car accidents has been currently growing. Some people hold the opinion that the government should raise the age limit for young drivers as well as lowering the age limit of the aged ones.

Nevertheless, we cannot consider age as the main reason of accidents, because there are many young and aged drivers who are very fit for driving. However, many other factors lead to road accidents. For instance, drivers who are drunk and also those who take drugs, regardless of their ages, do not concentrate while driving as their minds are totally distracted because of the alcohol and the drugs effect.

Bad health conditions, also, play an important role in accidents, in particular eyes diseases such as weak sight or color blindness. Drivers who suffer from such illness do not usually have a clear vision for the road or the signs, and therefore they are more likely to make accidents.

In order to reduce this huge number of accidents, some effective steps must be taken in consideration. For example, an awareness campaign should be held by the media, that the people should not drive if they are drunk of under the effect of drugs even if they have all the other privileges that allow them to drive, explaining the consequences of such cases. Moreover, an accurate medical check should be done at least once every year for those who have a valid driving license especially the aged ones, so that any eye or heart diseases can be easily be discovered.

In conclusion, I believe that if we succeed in applying all these effective procedures to ensure the maximum safety for both drivers and pedestrians, we will not need to change the age limit of the drivers; hence we will have more aware people.