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Posts by reza56t
Joined: Apr 23, 2013
Last Post: Jul 8, 2013
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reza56t   
Apr 23, 2013
Writing Feedback / Competition sports,both team and individual have no place in student's curriculum? [5]

Nowadays, in order to expanding education, necessity to physical activities is the most prominent stuffs. Sport and competition might be in school curriculum for developing pupils' creativity and responsibility.

Although, sport gives pupils' energy and time,it helps them to grow their creativity and let them to examinate their burden.In a school competition, all competitor do their tasks and they will be known their feature responsibility in the society,even if, it may be had some costs for them such as casualties, stay away from courses and so on.

on the other hand,sport and competition grow up students' sprite and help them for learning,also,make them healthy and expert says :healthy mind in healthy body. Body activity will increase heartbeat,besides,team working has pulse effects on students by playing their role rightly.

Defiantly, paying attention only to study makes students only single side so up brings only theoretical students. Sports and other activities like scientific picnic will grow up them to pragmatic person, furthermore, sick and fat students could not be learnt as well as strong and slim students.

As a result,it is important to paying attention to sport as a useful activity in school since society needs slim and expert person to grow up
reza56t   
Jul 8, 2013
Undergraduate / essay- family influence An college application essay [5]

Throughout my the childhood and teenage years, my parents have put great effort in shaping me into [as] a great person. Because they had been helped me to build many positive personalities, I am now A person with strong sense of justice, sympathetic, and many others has been growth. However, I believe it is believe that passionate, challenging and optimistic are three personalities that affect me the most.

Hi,I think it is better to write formal.Do not use I,my,Our or some things like that;make passive sentences and prevent using I and etc.

It will be better by keeping practice.
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