Writing Feedback / mother tongue threat; its better that children begin to learn a foreign language [6]

Hello, guys. I am taking IELTS the 25th May. Thank you in advance.

Some people belive that it is better for children begin to learn a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

Do the advantages overweigh the disadvantages?

In competitive society, many educationalists recommend that children should learn a foreign language at primary school. Thus, many parents want their children learn a foreign language at private school or a foreign language course.This essay wil discuss benefits and drawbacks succh a policy.

It is proved that with scientific approach that children learn a foreign language quite easily than teenagers because of their brain is not made up with their mother tongue stucture. In addition, teaching a foreign language for children is more easier for teachers because of childrens' enthusiasm to learn new things so that teachers can teach a foreign language them using toys, games, and cheerful small talking. Moreover , they would aware of different culture resulting in increasing their overlook of world.

Nevertheless, learning foreign languge influence childrens' development in many ways, it impact on them in some negative ways. First and foremost, children would have lack of respect for their culture and neglect their mother tongue. As a result, they would tend to speak with mixing different languages so that some experts say learning a foreign language at early age would threaten their mother tongue. Moreover, there are shortages of teachers who have experienced with teaching a foreign language at childrens' early age and not have a sufficient teaching methodology that develop with all parts of a foreign language.

To conclude, in the globalized era, learning a foreign language is priority that gives them a great deal of opportunities for their future life and communicate different people.

Writing Feedback / Should voluntary community service be compulsory? [7]

Hi, guys. This is my second one. Give me your feedbacks. Thank you in advance.

In the globalized society, educationalists and experts and believe that a wide range of voluntary activities should be a priority programme in high school. However some parents and students do not support such a policy, there many benefits such a programme for teenagers' socialization and our society.

There are reasons why some patients are reluctant that teenagers participate in unpaid service. First and foremost, they strongly believe studying and focusing on lessons are essential responsibilites for students. In addition, high school year is beginning of students future career resulting in they have to opt their studying field. Moreover, most programmes of high school contain more scientific approach and test that require a great deal of concentration, self-study and time from them.

Nevertheless, voluntary activities' develop not only teenagers' personality in many ways but also make our society more peaceful. Firs of all, teenagers are very sensitive in positive and negative things so that voluntary activities orientate them to good deed. Moreover , their overlook of life would alter in positive ways, which help them to understand value of kindness, generousity and patience that more important than money.

To conclude, unpaid service should be compulsory in high school program me that change positively teenagers' behavior resulting in they know value of life.