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mother tongue threat; its better that children begin to learn a foreign language


Bessinger 2 / 5 1  
May 11, 2013   #1
Hello, guys. I am taking IELTS the 25th May. Thank you in advance.

Some people belive that it is better for children begin to learn a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.

Do the advantages overweigh the disadvantages?

In competitive society, many educationalists recommend that children should learn a foreign language at primary school. Thus, many parents want their children learn a foreign language at private school or a foreign language course.This essay wil discuss benefits and drawbacks succh a policy.

It is proved that with scientific approach that children learn a foreign language quite easily than teenagers because of their brain is not made up with their mother tongue stucture. In addition, teaching a foreign language for children is more easier for teachers because of childrens' enthusiasm to learn new things so that teachers can teach a foreign language them using toys, games, and cheerful small talking. Moreover , they would aware of different culture resulting in increasing their overlook of world.

Nevertheless, learning foreign languge influence childrens' development in many ways, it impact on them in some negative ways. First and foremost, children would have lack of respect for their culture and neglect their mother tongue. As a result, they would tend to speak with mixing different languages so that some experts say learning a foreign language at early age would threaten their mother tongue. Moreover, there are shortages of teachers who have experienced with teaching a foreign language at childrens' early age and not have a sufficient teaching methodology that develop with all parts of a foreign language.

To conclude, in the globalized era, learning a foreign language is priority that gives them a great deal of opportunities for their future life and communicate different people.
hahong 6 / 11 5  
May 11, 2013   #2
This essay wil discuss benefits and drawbacks succh a policy.

----> of this policy

many parents want their children learn a foreign language at private school or a foreign language course

----> to learn

because of their brain is not made up with their mother tongue stucture

---->Because

teachers can teach a foreign language them using toys, games, and cheerful small talking

---> teachers can teach a foreign language to them by using toys, games, and cheerful small talking

hey would aware of different culture

---> They would be aware of different cultures.

learning foreign languge influence childrens' development in many ways, it impact on them in some negative ways

----> influences , impacts
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
May 11, 2013   #3
In this society, many educationalists recommend that children should learn a foreign language at primary school .

.... tell why they recommend so;
In this competitive society, many educationalists recommend that children should begin learning a foregin language at primary school itself in order to be prepared to take up future challenges.

Thus, many parents want their children learn a foreign language at private school or a foreign language course.

.... this sounds a bit irrelevant. Why you mention about the places that teach foreign language? Your essay topic is about learning English from primary school level and it does not talk about other institutions. Always maintain your alignment with the topic throughout your essay.

This essay wilwill discuss benefits and drawbacks succhsuch a policy.
OP Bessinger 2 / 5 1  
May 12, 2013   #4
yeah, i made some grammatical mistakes. It is so useful for preparing my IELTS exam. Thank you so much:)))

I really need point at least 6.0 What do you think how many score should I get ? :)
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
May 12, 2013   #5
I really need point at least 6.0 What do you think how many score should I get ? :)

Well... I have not done IELTS so that I have no idea as to how much you can score here... But I can see you have good writing skills and you have enough potential to get your desired band, and may be even more.

This is the essay structure I recommend for this task;
INTRODUCTION; Introduce your topic to the reader and state your opinion
BODY PARA 1; Your first reason to hold that opinion + One specific example to support that opinion
BODY PARA 2: Your second reason + example
CONCLUSION; Sum up everything that you said above and reinstate your opinion.
OP Bessinger 2 / 5 1  
May 13, 2013   #6
Thank you for your encouragement and sending me an essay structure.:)))


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