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Posts by chauuyenbinh
Joined: Jun 27, 2013
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chauuyenbinh   
Jun 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / Watching too much TV and violent images - essay [8]

Last week, I accidentally saw my cousin was watching violent show on TV. He is just eight years old so I force him to turn off the TV. I talk with his mother, and i realized that he predicted to TV. I think watching TV too much is not good for young children.

Watching too much make a bad affection to their healthy and behaviour. Young children do not take part in outdoor activities, instead of, they spend much time watching TV with junk food that make them easily to be obesity and not active. They just wach and hear the TV, but not commune with it. That habit lead to their bad communication with others. Watching TV too much also damage their eye sight. Recently, there are variety channels on tv, and most of them are not approxiate to children's age. Violent and sexual images appear many times on tv every day. Young children may less sensitive to the content of violence, and acceptviolence as a way to resolve life's difficulties or even imitate the violence they have seen. Some people have argued that lots of tv programs help children have a logical thinking and basis morality. Children also can study many useful things on tv so that they expect watching tv is not bad for young children. This may be true; however, if young children watching tv too much, parents can not supervise their children all the time. They can not know what contents their children has watched exactly to prevent.

Avowdedly, watching tv too much cause many negative influences for young children. Parents should permit their children watching tv about 2 hours a day, and remmember supervising the content they are waching. This is a good way to protect children from bad impacts.
chauuyenbinh   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / TOURISM and its IMPACT on our society [7]

The essay is coherence.
I wonder that in the sentence "it can put great pressure on an area,and lead to negative enviromental impacts on air and water quality,vegetation,soil,wild life,and many other thing.", "thing" or "things" is right?
chauuyenbinh   
Jun 29, 2013
Writing Feedback / My sister, my roommate - MY COMPARISON AND CONTRAST ESSAY [2]

I have a sister, and she is also my roommate. She is studying master in England so that I feel a bit alone. My sister and I is usually argueing about something, but now i really miss her as well as our arguement. We have many difference and similarity in appearence and character.

I am a slim girl with a long hair. In contrast, my sister is athlete with a short hair. I always appear with a friendly face but I am really tarciturn and strict with others. I has a lots thought, emotion but I just do not like to show it; wheras my sister, she is the complete opposite. My sister is very talkative and easy-going although she often appear with a poker face. Sometimes, I am tired of her voice when she talk too much. I wonder that how can she talk consecutive over an hour and why she has too much things need to talk. Maybe because of that difference, she has many friends than me. She is reckless in every housework so that I have to redo her duty with a nervy attitute.

Despite of our difference, we are similar. We love shopping, reading book and cooking in free time. We are both into the fashion and we give each other advise on what should wear, what should not wear. In the same way, we like to live independent. We not only independ on our parents's money but also every decision in life. We choose what school we like from secondary to university. We have a part time job and earn money to buy all things that we affort ourself when we was 16 years old.

We are very different in some way so that we argue a lots. However, we always take part in every event together because we has the same hobby. I know that my sister love me so much, and she always by my side to help me when I am in trouble. I am very happy to be her young sister. The more arguement we have the more happier we feel. Hope she turn back home soon.
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