Writing Feedback / "Only the academically able can be the elite of society." Do you agree? [4]

"Your mindset determines your destiny", this quoted from a once popular philosophy master, Confucius. Now, in this sentence, the cause of your destiny is your mindset. But, is it always true that higher education you have indicates you have a better mindset? In this problem, I strongly oppose if the "only" one who can become an elite is people who succeed in academic in case many leaders do not always mean they have good education background.

Firstly, achievers do not need to master mathematics, physics, biology and other subjects which are usually learned in education institutions. In fact, many politicians and leaders were born from families that are not economically able and cannot afford any education degree. For instance, Nelson Mandela used to live amid desert condition and had just undergone a little education but he became a president later and today, he is known to be the pioneer of anti apartheid movements.

But, there are those who claim Academic skill is the most powerful tool to achieve dreams. Furthermore, many of those state that the only way to achieve it is education in schools and universities. Here, I do not argue that education is not needed. Yet, the additional word "only" leads me disagree this topic.

Secondly, many graduate students either from a school or a university have nasty behaviors such as smoking, fighting ,or others. It is an evidence that education, nowadays, focus more on academic instead of forming character.

To sum up, elite can come from many backgrounds either from academically good or not. It is how you think that determines what your future might be. Remember this quote, "Not everyone can become an elite, but an elite can come from anywhere." Inspired by ratatouille

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Writing Feedback / Should student's textbooks be replaced by notebook computers? [3]

In these modern days, Computers have taken center stage in all aspects of human lives. Moreover, it cannot be avoided that computers bring about a lot of improvements especially in quickening task completion and solving human problems. Hence, students should be facilitated with computers in order to prepare new generations which can handle impending problems faster and more precisely.

Firstly, Discussing about today's education, we inevitably have used too many papers which lead to the increasing of the need of trees. Indonesia, for instance, has extinguished half of its rain forests in these few decades. Furthermore, some irresponsible businessmen massively chop the tress without allowance which causes some unexpected disasters happen and exterminate the surroundings. Hence, for the solution, papers should be replaced with computers which are more portable, eco-friendly, and can be used in a spacious manner.

There is a myth that only the affluent can afford computers, due to the fact that computers are still expensive enough for some people. But, computers, nowadays, are much cheaper than before and computer scientists will strive to find ways to create computers which are more affordable in the future.

Dating back to the past, when "The fun they had" and some science-fiction books published, there was an expectation that computers, someday, would replace papers and other materials to provide better education in the world. Then, our task is to support this expectation and to search relentlessly to render possible improvement that would generate the expected computers.

To sum up, technology era as today indisputably need to follow the current trend so that we can compete with others. Moreover, computers are proven to bring a lot of beneficial inputs to humans' jobs. Hence, i strongly recommend that computers should be the main tools of education instead of papers.