wakingdream
Jul 12, 2013
Writing Feedback / SAT: Do changes that make life easier not necessarily make them better? [8]
I don't think renowned was the best adjective to use. Maybe notorious would have been better.And try varying you sentence structure cos all your sentences are too similar. Finally get a stronger conclusion
I don't think renowned was the best adjective to use. Maybe notorious would have been better.And try varying you sentence structure cos all your sentences are too similar. Finally get a stronger conclusion