Hannahbananaess
Aug 3, 2013
Writing Feedback / SCIENTIFIC MYSTERIES; Vaccines and autism [7]
I need advice on how this paragraph sounds. It is for my AP Language class. It is on vaccines and autism. There was no guidelines for this paper, only that it had to be two pages in length and on the topic of autism and vaccines.
There is a reason there are still such things as scientific mysteries. Science simply cannot explain why or how some things occur. Autism, for example, is in a way a scientific mystery. Science cannot explain exactly how autism forms. That, along with the fact that the rates of children with autism in the United States are growing, is causing panic among parents.(SSW 10) This "panic" along with social media provided the "perfect storm" against vaccinations. Parents were eager to find a cause for their child's autism-so they began to blame vaccinations. As a result, this has caused a significant decrease in the amount of children receiving vaccines. The problem with this is that it inadvertently puts other children, along with infants too young to get vaccinated, at risk. Children should receive vaccines because, there is no scientific evidence correlating autism to vaccinations, autism is a lifelong disease, and it protects herd immunity.
I need advice on how this paragraph sounds. It is for my AP Language class. It is on vaccines and autism. There was no guidelines for this paper, only that it had to be two pages in length and on the topic of autism and vaccines.
There is a reason there are still such things as scientific mysteries. Science simply cannot explain why or how some things occur. Autism, for example, is in a way a scientific mystery. Science cannot explain exactly how autism forms. That, along with the fact that the rates of children with autism in the United States are growing, is causing panic among parents.(SSW 10) This "panic" along with social media provided the "perfect storm" against vaccinations. Parents were eager to find a cause for their child's autism-so they began to blame vaccinations. As a result, this has caused a significant decrease in the amount of children receiving vaccines. The problem with this is that it inadvertently puts other children, along with infants too young to get vaccinated, at risk. Children should receive vaccines because, there is no scientific evidence correlating autism to vaccinations, autism is a lifelong disease, and it protects herd immunity.