Writing Feedback / IELTS WRITING TASK 1:Bar graph/ Asian Elephants [3]

The graph below shows the changes in maximum number of Asian elephants in 1997 and 2004.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The graph illustrates the alterations in the maximum count of Asian elephants in nine countries in 1997 and 2004.

The number of elephants was clearly the highest in India,while it was the lowest in China in the both of years,while in other countries there were fluctuation in numbers.

In 1997 in India elephants number reached to a peak of about 9900 elephants,while in 2004 it declined by nearly 2500 elephants.
Coming next,Myanmar with approximately the half of what India has got with almost 5300 in 1997 and 4600 in 2004.Thailand coming third in 1997 with approximately 4600,but that didn't happen in 2004 because number of elephants dropped to reach about 1300.Malaysia and Sri Lanka were almost the same in elephants numbers in 1997 with about 3000,while in 2004 a drop in elephants number in Malaysia happened to reach nearly 1000,while in Sri Lanka a slight decrease by about 400 occurred.In Laos the numbers in the two years stayed the same at around 1200,not so far from that comes Vietnam with about 1300 and 1200 in 1997 and 2004 respectively,In addition and close to that Cambodia counted about 1300 in 1997 and about 1500 in 2004.Last comes China with 1000 elephants in 1997 and with only about 400 in 2004.

Overall,numbers of Asian elephants had a decline from 1997 to 2004 in all of the nine countries with different amounts except Laos stayed the same.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS : What contributes for a GOOD JOB? University education or job experience? [6]

Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a good job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.

How far do you agree or disagree with the above views?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write at least 250 words.

Life has many aspects and one of the most important sides of it, is having a good job because when you work in something you are convenient with,the results will be splendid.The way to get a good job differ from person to person and from country to country.

Most people who get a good job study in the university and get a certificate to help in getting them into work market so their certificate will be some kind of a weapon or guarantee to have a good job.However, that doesn't mean that people who finished their school can't have a good job,In spit of not studying at university,some people by their own way, know how to find a good job and after school they go to work market and get familiar with it so that they can be very good at it and may have some experience,sometimes even uneducated persons may get a good job, whether by luck or hard-working.However i think the more educated you be the easier you can get a good job.

What is a good job?
That's a hard question to answer with one or two words because every person has his/her own perspective in answering this question.Some people see good job as having a good income,others look at it as low working hours,while others just look to job as they are meant to do it.Nevertheless,having a job nowadays regardless all of that is very competitive and injustice sometimes cause many factors contributing in that.

Every person like to have a good job that enables him/her to live a wealthy life and to help in raising children effectively and supporting them.In addition every human being has his own dreams which may be having a beautiful house or maybe going abroad in a vacation or having an expensive car and good salary will help them to make their dreams come true.Moreover people get respect when they do a good job and that's important in any society.

Having a good job has many effects on person and society.for example:when a person is comfortable with his work,he will give his best trying to improve his society as a whole and the company he works in,in private so it is a ''win-win'' deal.

In conclusion,I think getting a good job is not easy but also is not impossible because you have many ways to get it,whether by education route or by the person's hard working.At the end nothing is guaranteed but some people has more chances than others.