Writing Feedback / Ielts: Should we ban private education? NO! [4]

This is usally rooted to the lack of money given my government institutions.
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The essay is apparently written by an expert and very good user. The position is stated straightforward and the topic sentences are exquisitely crafted which are then followed by supporting sentences and developing sentences as the essay writing bibles would approve of.

This essay would receive my opinion of ' great'

Letters / Motivation letter for applying a Master's Degree [2]

I am writing this letter in response to the announcement posted on your webpage regarding the Master of Science Information and Automation Engineering currently available. I respectfully submit this letter of application since I believe my academic background and experience are well suited to meet the needs of the position.

This group of sentences at the start of your application essay, in my opinion, is not necessary. Instead you could begin with some striking facts or features of this discipline and then proceed with your understanding of the course that you think is offered at the department.

The SOP overall is excellent. Go on ' Excelsior"

Undergraduate / I speak out about my religious belief; College Application Essay to TAMU [2]

Where is the setting, where is the collaboration my friend? All you have spilled is your diary thoughts so to speak. I sympathize with you and I have also read a few dawkins volumes but thatis not the whole story. The task requirement is not addressed properly.