Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 2 : Modern Technology make parents have no time for their children [5]

Nowadays, there are many people joy to the modern society. Specially, parents integrate with their children in the modern life but they do not know that make them spend less time for their kids.

The first reason is parents are too busy with their career and their own complicated life. They wake up early in the morning then go home really late at night when their children have already slept. For example, my neighbor's family, the mother is an accountant so her children are spent 2 hours for fun. In addition, this is a divorced family so the father also does not care of his kids.

Secondly, Children have to study a lot at school and in extra classes. Every time they want to have some interesting activities to relax but do not have one because the thick schedule does not allow them to do or they have to move that occasions for next week, even next month. This is also affected by the family those want their kids keep studying to become a genius or even a billionaire in the future. That why they have to go all days long and no time for talk with their parents.

Modern society is developing so many student take time for playing games more than studying and talking with their mothers and fathers. However, some family let them play all days just only for kind of a reason is have patties with friends. Things like these usually happen in the rich families. Take Jessica, a friend of mine, an example; her families always go out let her home alone by hershelf without a person to keep an eye on her so that why she always plays games and abandon studying.

In collusion, I strongly agree with this statement modern society make parents have no time for their daughter and sons. For all reasons I gave above, I hope parents can realize that not to affect for their children.

Writing Feedback / The fewer language the world have, the more convenient we can live our life [3]

Language is presented a part of every single countries 's culture and society. However, many countries nowadays are developed and it will be more simple if there are fewer common languages.

The first reason is the worldwide economics. Countries are developed by commerce and the support of the government. It will be more convenience for two companies from two countries sign a contract. We can meet a big barrier language lead us to a failure in negotiation. Because of the flat world, trading between countries is easier than ever.

Secondly, education in our society today is become global. The number of international student come from overseas is increasing constantly each year. Therefore this is important for them to use the popular language for communication and studying. For Example, Vietnamese students study aboard in the United State or United Kingdom, they must use English in order to integrate.

Final but not least, network society made us can connect and make friends with people all over the world, simply by a click of "Mouse". Such as Facebook, Since 2006, There has been over a billion people use it like an attractive rend. Therefrom, this is absolutely people using a common language to communicate.

In conclusion, I want to emphasize that I totally agree with this statement " the fewer language the world have, the more convenient we can live our life.