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Oct 9, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS ESSAY:WHAT CAN WE DO TO PROMOTE EQUALITY? [7]
Hi all, I would like to write my views here. Could someone review and correct it. I would highly appreciate your views on this. Thank you
What Can We do to Promote Equality?
Introduction
Equality can be defined as a leveling process through which the differences between people are minimized. It is essential to achieve equality despite people's differences in terms of their nationality, voice, color, origin, religion, sex and age. To promote equality we need to provide equal and adequate opportunities and equal rights.
One possible solution is to provide equal and adequate opportunity for all individuals without any discrimination. By providing adequate opportunity, we ensure that the right man gets the right opportunity and not equal distribution of family property among successors'. Providing equal opportunity gives an individual a fair chance to achieve their full potential. It should be done in a manner that encourage and value diversity. It also aims at correcting past imbalances and ensures that dealings with different peoples are conducted in a constructive way which does not lead to unjustified discrimination.
Protection of rights and freedom of an individual and treating them fairly is the second approach to promoting equality. All people in a society must be treated in a manner that promotes dignity and ensures that they are at par with each other. Providing equal rights in contesting, voting and holding public office bridges the gap between the common person and the high in the society. The highest office in the land should be within the reach of the average person in the street.
Conclusion
Protecting individual rights and freedom and providing them with equal opportunity is a sure way of promoting equality as they encourage diversity and does not lead to discrimination. Each person, society or organization should aim at promoting equality through his or her actions or policies.
Hi all, I would like to write my views here. Could someone review and correct it. I would highly appreciate your views on this. Thank you
What Can We do to Promote Equality?
Introduction
Equality can be defined as a leveling process through which the differences between people are minimized. It is essential to achieve equality despite people's differences in terms of their nationality, voice, color, origin, religion, sex and age. To promote equality we need to provide equal and adequate opportunities and equal rights.
One possible solution is to provide equal and adequate opportunity for all individuals without any discrimination. By providing adequate opportunity, we ensure that the right man gets the right opportunity and not equal distribution of family property among successors'. Providing equal opportunity gives an individual a fair chance to achieve their full potential. It should be done in a manner that encourage and value diversity. It also aims at correcting past imbalances and ensures that dealings with different peoples are conducted in a constructive way which does not lead to unjustified discrimination.
Protection of rights and freedom of an individual and treating them fairly is the second approach to promoting equality. All people in a society must be treated in a manner that promotes dignity and ensures that they are at par with each other. Providing equal rights in contesting, voting and holding public office bridges the gap between the common person and the high in the society. The highest office in the land should be within the reach of the average person in the street.
Conclusion
Protecting individual rights and freedom and providing them with equal opportunity is a sure way of promoting equality as they encourage diversity and does not lead to discrimination. Each person, society or organization should aim at promoting equality through his or her actions or policies.