Writing Feedback / What are the pros and cons of immigration? [4]

at first i tend to mention some reasons of immigration: totally there is a basic reason for this subject,having a underdeveloped country,this also can have lots of reasons again for instant,social,economical,educational systems,industrial etc

for the first term,social problems can make lots of lacks in society: for instant,deperivation of fairly low,prejudice etc.in my opinion some people cant tolerate this kinds of thing and the easiest way is escaping from this society for the hope of finding and then making a better life but most of them cant be successful because there is no ideal society in the world every where has its lacks

economical is also so serious,one of the most-have needs of people is having a good life and ideal one, there are again lots of factors for having a relaxed life but money is the firs and formost some countries especially undeveloped ones doesnt supply a good job with good fringe benefits for its people this can make young people to leave their countries and immigrating but, any way it should be a brilliant think for resolving your needs

lack of a good educational system is the most dangerous on whitch causes the brain drain in undeveloped countries,countries that they have a essential need for them,new brains with new plans and lots of dreams for having a good society.when they encounter with a jobless society whitch is full of shortages and discriminations every where, they shock and they think that this society is so far from my mind and they make a good decision for themself and the worst for their society finally they escape this could be catastrophic.

eventully,the immigration is a big decision whitch you make for your life and by contemplating its pros and cons it could be a good way to escape but you have to know that life is a fight and a hero never escape from a battle untile victory so never forget this advice,don't let the fate take its cours'

Writing Feedback / IELTS:In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries th [5]

In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to do almost anything they like. To what extent should children have to follow rules?

The extent to which children have to follow rules is in itself a very complex issue, since children across the world grow up in very different cultures. In India for example, children are expected to be very submissive to their parents as well as other adults around them. This, however, is not the case with the Western countries of the world where children follow the motto 'Thou shalt do what thou wilt' as promoted by celebrities and rock stars. I believe that following strict rules has both advantages as well as serious drawbacks as discussed below.

Firstly, strict rules of behavior create responsible and respectful children who in turn mature into respectful adults. This forms a stable society which is virtually free from negative trends such as prostitution and drug abuse. Secondly, if children do not follow strict rules of behavior, they may get out of hand and become work-shy and indolent. This may then create a burden on the society since the government has to find ways to cater for these social ills.

However, forcing children to follow strict rules of behavior doesn't always yield positive results as discussed above, most of the time it backfires and works against society. For example, teenagers are more likely to do the opposite of what they're told to do simply because they want to be independent. Children should also have rights to exercise their free will and develop their own pattern of behaviors. Imposing strict rules may simply destroy the individuality of children.

At the end of the day, it is clear that children should be guided by rules, but these rules should not be imposed on them because as human beings, they need to have room to develop their own traits of character and adopt a behavioral pattern of their own.