Undergraduate / Failure. Common App. Essay about the first time I received my license and crashed my car. [3]

What I got from your essay is that you had a lot of ideas of different directions to go and things you wanted to say, but you could only fit in parts of yor ideas. I think focusing on one or two of the things you learned, and giving MORE INSIGHT INTO HOW THOSE LESSONS CAME ABOUT could really improve your essay.