flowerchild31
Nov 11, 2013
Undergraduate / Eight houses, four cities, four different schools; UC-world you come from [3]
This seems very negative, like there is no one in the world you can depend on. This may come off as someone who cannot work with others. I do understand where you are coming from 100% though. I have experienced a much similar time. I understand the pain, resentment and unfairness and inability to trust/rely on others. But for this application it is important to try to take something positive away which I think you have explained well but I think it needs to be reinforced in the last sentence rather than having it sound pessimistic.
undependable,
This seems very negative, like there is no one in the world you can depend on. This may come off as someone who cannot work with others. I do understand where you are coming from 100% though. I have experienced a much similar time. I understand the pain, resentment and unfairness and inability to trust/rely on others. But for this application it is important to try to take something positive away which I think you have explained well but I think it needs to be reinforced in the last sentence rather than having it sound pessimistic.