Writing Feedback / Effects of computers on children/youth [7]

could u pls correct it :

Computer has become a part of almost everyone's life. It has been in discussion for a long time that whether it is good or bad for children. I believe that its virtues are far more than its vices.

The principal reason for considering computers for children in their everyday life is its usefulness in learning new things. There are many software that make difficult concepts of hard and dry subjects easy to absorb. For example, Algebra and Geometry are the two important and toughest concepts of mathematics but the intuitive nature of some good software makes it easy to learn for children. Moreover, the learning is very fast with computers and a child's mind adopts it quickly. To learn new things computers can help a child in various ways.

On the other hand, with use of computer, one can have access to unclassified information content. For example, if a particular child has access to internet, with use of computer, child can easily find intentionally or by mistake the sexually explicit material or profound content like terrorist activities and crime. Result of which can be poor mental and psychological health.

However, without the supervision from adults, children often misuse computers. They are easily attracted to electronic games that tend to be intensed and rather violent. The player is usually the 'hero' of the game and too much exposure will lead children to be self-centred and unsociable.

I could conclude that parents' responsibility should be increased and further observation and restricted rules must be placed to guide children to the proper way of using computer in order to prevent the children from the negative effect of computers.