Posts by Talilah

Talilah

Nov 20, 2013

Undergraduate / BU instantly became my top choice for college; Why Boston U is a good fit? [2]

kunell
I first became interested in Boston University when I read about it on a college search website. I hadn't heard much about the school before this point and was anything but familiar with it. So I started looking further into it, and the more I researched the school, the more I liked it. The combination of a great education inand a large city seemed like the perfect fit for me. At that point (you already said "this point" at the start of your essay, maybe say it some other way), BU instantly became my top choice for college.

What initially drew me ~~into~~ to BU was its diversity (I like this sentence). With such a vast amount of countries represented at BU, I knew that it wouldn't be difficult for me to fit in~~find my place~~. And, just as important, find people who share my desires to learn and grow as an individual. BU ~~just~~ seems like ~~the best~~ place (an ideal place) for a student who is highly motivated and eager to learn. The extensive study abroad programs and internships that BU offers are ~~probably~~ what interest me the most. I am ~~very~~ anxious to gain valuable hands- on experience from the ~~broad~~numerous opportunities that BU offers . I feel that these characteristics and tools, at Boston University, are just what I need to achieve my goals and contribute to society. (good idea for your last sentence, but it sounds a little abrupt)

this is the first essay I've commented on, so if I messed up with all the font colors and comments and stuff, sorry! :3 I'm going to put up my essay for Bowdoin soon, and I'd really appreciate it if you looked it over for me too (it's really rough right now and waaay over the word limit.) Thanks!

Talilah

Nov 20, 2013

Undergraduate / I want to challenge myself; Bowdoin (prompt 1: Intellectual engagement) [4]

PROMPT: Bowdoin students and alumni often cite world-class faculty and opportunities for intellectual engagement, the College's commitment to the Common Good, and the special quality of life on the coast of Maine as important aspects of the Bowdoin experience.

Reflecting on your own interests and experiences, please comment on one of the following:
1. Intellectual engagement (I Chose this one)
2. The Common Good
3. Connection to place
I chose #1
Word limit: 250
My words: 284

I work hard at my academics, not because my parents put pressure on me to do well, but because I want to challenge myself to see what I'm capable of (the "sibling rivalry" I have with my twin sister doesn't hurt either). My parents let me know that they are happy with however I do in school, as long as they know I try to do my best, and I value and appreciate that as well. I push myself in school by taking honors and AP classes because I know that, if I put in the time and effort, I can rise to the challenge. What draws me to Bowdoin is the ambition and determination to learn that all of the students seem to possess. I respect the self-improvement mindset, and the motivation to develop and expand as a student; it makes me happy to try my best, even if it does cause me some (... a LOT of) stress.

When I finally understand an idea or concept that has been unclear to me, it's like a gear clicks into place, which is the best feeling in the world. I enjoy school and my subjects, thanks to some of the inspiring and engaging teachers I have had in the past-I owe them my progress as a student thus far. Thanks to the assistance I have received from a few outstanding teachers, I have been taught to not just memorize and repeat information, but to absorb it, process it, and generate potent questions that arise when such topics are discussed, debated, and analyzed-a skill that I aim to improve and further develop with Bowdoin's help and guidance.

(I know it's rough, so I'd love any constructive criticism or suggestions, or any ideas on how to shorten it to 250 words. Thanks! :)

Talilah

Nov 21, 2013

Undergraduate / I want to challenge myself; Bowdoin (prompt 1: Intellectual engagement) [4]

When I finally understand an idea or concept that has been unclear to me, a gear clicks into place; it's the best feeling in the world. I enjoy school and my subjects, thanks to some inspiring and engaging teachers I have had in the past-In part, I certainly owe my progress as a student, thus far, to them. I have been taught not just to memorize and repeat information, but to absorb it, process it, and generate potent questions when difficult topics are discussed, debated, and analyzed. These are skills I aim to improve and further develop with help and guidance in the next four years.

I work hard at my academics, not because my parents put pressure on me to do well, but because I challenge myself to see what I'm capable of (the "sibling rivalry" I have with my twin sister doesn't hurt, either). I have pushed myself in school by taking honors and AP classes because I know that, if I put in the time and effort, I can always rise to the demands. I most respect people who struggle to develop and expand their understandings; it makes me happy to similarly try my best, even if it does occasionally cause me stress. My ambition and my determination to be part of a strong, academic community of dedicated learners is what attracts me most to Bowdoin College.

-- I went over it with my teacher and this is what I have now :) thanks for your input!