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alex90   
Nov 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / 'Women less appreciated in society?' - an IELTS exam [6]

Some people say that women can do everything that men can do and they even do it better. others claim that " a woman's place is in the home". What do you think?

Since the dawn of human ingenuity, women and men have had different roles in the community. Yet some believe that females are much better to fulfill certain tasks which even man can not. However, owing to the genetic inheritance and social components, these disparities do exist and my personal view is outlined below.

For a start, it is irrefutable that men are far better to perform any physical task. Olympic Games, to illustrate, divided two sexes into categories taking their physical strength into consideration. Thus, the notion that women can compete with men in every field is clearly flawed. Besides, females can not manage company as men do. They rest upon their personal feelings during opting for crucial choice, which hinder to the burgeon of the organisation.

Furthermore, women are regarded one step lower than their opposite gender and less appreciated in society as their focal point are to do household chores and children's upbringing. They often did not intervene to the budget of the family because husbands were solely breadwinners. Take for example Africa, where women's traditional roles have not been altered for centuries. They still stay at home and take care of their offspring' behavior. Nevertheless, such circumstances have been witnessed in 3rd world countries and in some developing world, affluent ones have already equalized the rank of two genders.

All in all, considering the views which have been pointed out, I reckon the disparity amongst men and women will never be converged as males are morally higher and physically dominant in each case
alex90   
Nov 27, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS academic - Rules on loan and credit card [6]

1. in the intro why you used replay instead of merely repay?
2. thrifty means extravagance or economical but not STRICT!!!
3. in the 2nd body you needed handicapped yet u used handicap
4. ,in turn, -- this phrase should stand between two commas
5. at the same paragraph ,,, debt cannot be limited , instead it can be increased!!! misusage of word
6. what do u mean by common man? i suppose u should not have been said this.
OVERALL: not bad . I think it is definitely 6.5+ well done !
alex90   
Nov 30, 2013
Writing Feedback / Do you agree that every organization has a right to set age maximum for the candidates ? [6]

Some workplaces set age maximums for applicants even though they are far away from the retirement age .Do you agree that every organization has a right to set age maximum for the candidates ?

In our contemporary world most of the both governmental and private organizations are determining age limits for their staff. From my perspective, it is not the right management policy for companies and setting these restrictions in unfair towards employees.

Some people believe that imposing age maximums to the code of any organizations improves the quality of the job performed as well as raising the productivity. Moreover, they tend to consider that upgrading personnel each period of time enables companies to attract more young people who are seen as new blood for the company.

In a stark contrast, updating staff all the time can lead to several consequences. First and foremost, it means that any employee will not have any job security which is the most essential issue in job performance . Whenever a worker feels secure ,the concerns of his will be related to the benefits of the company. Moreover, if there are some age limits in a workplace ,after being fired most of the workers will not be able to find a proper workplace for themselves which can raise the probability to unemployed as a result . These obstacles in long run can ,in turn, inflame age discrimination within the society and even uprisings thus troubling economic and social stability of the whole country.

Another point that should be taken into account is experience of people working for a long time at one place. The more a person works at the same work area , the better master of his job he becomes . Indeed, it would be much more beneficial for organizations to hire youngsters and let them cooperate with the elderly , so that they could exchange knowledge and experience that they possess.

Deducing from the points mentioned above , I once more reaffirm my position that setting age limits is unjust towards employees. I believe that both younger and elderly generations should be encouraged to perform their jobs cooperatively to avoid age discrimination and any detrimental outcomes.
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