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Posts by Girishgautams
Name: Girish dutt
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Last Post: Dec 10, 2013
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Girishgautams   
Dec 1, 2013
Writing Feedback / children in many countries are eating more fast-food and convenience snacks. [5]

children are the backbone for any country. if they are healthy, they can contribute to build a stronger economy. so it is essential to keep them healthy. In the modern era, children and adult both are influenced by fast food and pre made snacks. Furthermore, children's are more effective by this modern trend of eating fast food. Many countries are facing the same problems due to the many reasons.

Firstly, children are innocent and immature, they do what they see and heard. Fastfood and snacks companies spend millions of dollars on marketing through social media, newspapers, television, radio.They introduce many schemes to attract young kids for instance, Mc donald one of the largest fast food chain in the world , they attract them through toys, which comes with happy meals. Moreover, convenience snacks attract them with card games, toy cars and many cartoon characters. On the other hand, parents are equally responsible for these eating habits. They don't have enough time for their kids, to keep an eye on them. Parents are too busy in their professional life. They are providing them monthly pocket money and never bother to check , how children's are utilising that money . Moreover, eating fast food become a trend and popular eqully in adults.

The consequence can be dangerous for children's. This kind of eating habits and negligence by elders can lead them to serious health issues like obesity, can effect their physical and mental growth, diabetes, high blood pressure and also many heart daisies.

In conclusion , It is important for us to provide more attention towards our children's. Guide them to understand what is good for them and what is not. Control there eating habits by spending more time with them. Cook food at home most of the time, so they don't feel like eating outside.
Girishgautams   
Dec 7, 2013
Undergraduate / I have keen interest in farming - a story that tells my identity. [4]

the essay is good however you can start your essay with some general statement which will attract the reader more and also by this way it is easy for the reader to understand the essay. Do not use 'i' in every sentence. rest is fine. keep writing. we all are here to learn and we can only succeed by helping each other.
Girishgautams   
Dec 8, 2013
Writing Feedback / IELTS; Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. [5]

hi all, i am preparing for ielts please help me to improve my writing.
topic- Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish.
Why do you think this is happening?
What can governments do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

In the modern era, as we are developing , our daily needs are also increasing rapidly. Everything we noun a certain packaging that will produce more rubbish. I think it is true in almost every country , each household and family produces large amount of rubbish every week. Their are many other factors which contributes towards the high production of rubbish.

Firstly, In many countries like india and china has a large population. Large population means increase in demands of goods, its means more rubbish. In addition to,in these countries peoples are not aware with the harmful affects of rubbish and how it can disbalance our environment. Furthermore, our industries also been a main reason for producing large amount of rubbish. There are no specific guidelines for industries, how they can recycle or dump there waste or rubbish.

In these circumstances, What should government do or can do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced? Firstly, government can educate peoples through advertisement, newspapers and radio. So people can be aware of its harmful affect toward our environment. Secondly,By placing more and more rubbish bins in the public areas, government can reduce rubbish. To control the industrial waste, government can increase the tax on them and set a guidelines for them which are need to be follow strictly by them. Nevertheless, government can build more recycle plants to reduce waste and can be used again.

In conclusion, this is the time to take a stand, as we all are under the global warming. We have seen many disastrous incident around the world. In my opinion, Before it is too late for us it is better we work together as a family to save our earth.
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