jdg
Dec 6, 2013
Undergraduate / I'm conflicted when it comes to my hopes of you; Stanford " future roommate" [13]
Prompt: Write a letter to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - get to know you better (250 words)
So I'm having issues capturing me in this essay - I have two drafts of it below
To my future roommate,
We don't know each other yet, but one thing is certain, you must be pretty cool and smart because you got into Stanford. Since we'll be sharing a room, let's get acquainted by listing a few things you should know about me:
- I love math and science, especially anything to do with robots.
- I love languages. I want to be the guy who can switch between five different languages mid-sentence and be understood in each.
- I don't take my commitments lightly. If I say I'm going to do something, it will get done.
- I have a dry, sarcastic sense of humor - I once joked about how fun the FUNdamental theorem of calculus is.
- I enjoy being active. I've done martial arts since age four and plan to continue while at Stanford but I'm also interested in trying new things like fencing or Ultimate Frisbee.
- I tend to live in my head. I can be content sitting, contemplating, and staring off into the distance, even if the distance is only a wall five feet in front of me.
- Although I rarely say it, my friends are important to me.
- I am quick to help others. If you are ever up late with homework, I'll do my best to help out - even if I'm swamped with my own work and know barely anything about the topic.
I look forward to meeting you in person!
Jesse
To my future roommate,
I'm conflicted when it comes to my hopes of you. Part of me wants you to be a fellow engineering major and the
other doesn't. Most of my friends share the dream of becoming an engineer which means they have intellectual interests
similar to my own - a love of math and science among others. If you too are a future engineer, then we could help each
other with homework as needed, discuss the latest class topics, laugh at my dry, punny math jokes like how fun the
FUNdamental theorem of calculus is, maybe even collaborate on research and I can guarantee that if you aren't already a
FIRST Robotics Competition (FRC) acolyte, I will convert you and we'll mentor a team together. On the other hand,
conversations with my non-engineering friends are always intriguing. I have one friend for example, whose knowledge of
philosophy and economics honestly makes me feel stupid. Even though this is an abnormal feeling for me, I recognize it as
an opportunity to challenge my mind and to learn. Regardless of your major however, there are a few things you should know
about me. I'm a perfectionist, but would never pretend to be very well organized - as long as you don't just throw things
on the floor, we'll get along fine.
I look forward to getting to know you over this next year. See you on "The Farm!"
Jesse
I feel like the second one is too formal, but I also worry that the first one doesn't flow well enough. If the second draft works better, then I need to cut down on words because there are a few points from the first that I'd like to include ("Living in my head" for one) but that I don't currently have room for. Any suggestions are welcome!
Prompt: Write a letter to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - get to know you better (250 words)
So I'm having issues capturing me in this essay - I have two drafts of it below
To my future roommate,
We don't know each other yet, but one thing is certain, you must be pretty cool and smart because you got into Stanford. Since we'll be sharing a room, let's get acquainted by listing a few things you should know about me:
- I love math and science, especially anything to do with robots.
- I love languages. I want to be the guy who can switch between five different languages mid-sentence and be understood in each.
- I don't take my commitments lightly. If I say I'm going to do something, it will get done.
- I have a dry, sarcastic sense of humor - I once joked about how fun the FUNdamental theorem of calculus is.
- I enjoy being active. I've done martial arts since age four and plan to continue while at Stanford but I'm also interested in trying new things like fencing or Ultimate Frisbee.
- I tend to live in my head. I can be content sitting, contemplating, and staring off into the distance, even if the distance is only a wall five feet in front of me.
- Although I rarely say it, my friends are important to me.
- I am quick to help others. If you are ever up late with homework, I'll do my best to help out - even if I'm swamped with my own work and know barely anything about the topic.
I look forward to meeting you in person!
Jesse
To my future roommate,
I'm conflicted when it comes to my hopes of you. Part of me wants you to be a fellow engineering major and the
other doesn't. Most of my friends share the dream of becoming an engineer which means they have intellectual interests
similar to my own - a love of math and science among others. If you too are a future engineer, then we could help each
other with homework as needed, discuss the latest class topics, laugh at my dry, punny math jokes like how fun the
FUNdamental theorem of calculus is, maybe even collaborate on research and I can guarantee that if you aren't already a
FIRST Robotics Competition (FRC) acolyte, I will convert you and we'll mentor a team together. On the other hand,
conversations with my non-engineering friends are always intriguing. I have one friend for example, whose knowledge of
philosophy and economics honestly makes me feel stupid. Even though this is an abnormal feeling for me, I recognize it as
an opportunity to challenge my mind and to learn. Regardless of your major however, there are a few things you should know
about me. I'm a perfectionist, but would never pretend to be very well organized - as long as you don't just throw things
on the floor, we'll get along fine.
I look forward to getting to know you over this next year. See you on "The Farm!"
Jesse
I feel like the second one is too formal, but I also worry that the first one doesn't flow well enough. If the second draft works better, then I need to cut down on words because there are a few points from the first that I'd like to include ("Living in my head" for one) but that I don't currently have room for. Any suggestions are welcome!