Research Papers / Rice husk; I want to continue my research studies by joining a study group [3]

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I did research for this project
This doesnt look good. Try to put it tin another way

I have planing to do further research ----> I am planning to do further research

I believe with the existing I joined WL-group can gain knowledge --> I believe that being a part of WL-group I can gain knowledge

Included in this packet, please find my curriculum vitae, --> Pls find my CV included in this packet

Graduate / I was numerically inclined; Statement of Purpose: Masters in Analytics [5]

I think you can add a bit more to make clear about your interests, your background says that but you can summarize. Also you can talk a bit about what do you want to do after joining masters..

Graduate / Evaluation of my Statement of Purpose for Masters in Computer Science in UCSD [2]

There is no conclusion. There is no reason why u want to get into this university. I also feel that u stressed more on extra curricular activities.

Graduate / My most consistent endeavor has been design; SOP [4]

The beginning and introduction are good. There is a required hook. The conclusion is a bit loose, u can talk more about what u want to do with grad course.

Undergraduate / The volunteering programs offered at Emory University - programs/activities [4]

There is no real example of any such past experiences. Be specific with anyone.

Undergraduate / One should have an aim in life; U Toronto; Engineering [4]

There is no related work experience and projects, your exposition as a child is just not enough...