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Posts by loumap
Name: Ali ABDULLAH
Joined: Dec 27, 2013
Last Post: Dec 28, 2013
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Dec 27, 2013
Undergraduate / TRIP TO COUNTRYSIDE; PERFECTLY CONTENT [3]

I chose the "describe and place or environment where you feel perfectly content and why" subject.

Thank you in advance !! I am really lost.

One of the most constructive experiences of my life was my trip to the countryside. Although the water is drawn and the electricity produced from dynamo, I quickly got adapted to their customs and found a pleasure in discovering this very respectuous yet hardworking culture. I met the wife of my dad's uncle, a very old and tender woman. In her rough traits, one would see a mischance ; but she is the only relic of her 13 siblings, what might have been repeated over many generations ; and I had in front of me, as Goud considers, all the luck natural selection could give us.

As a response to the multiple questions my curious nature assailed my hosts, I was asked what were my hobbies. I told them about how passionated I was about sports, and if karate, sailing, climbing, handball and even gymnastics were easy to describe, I had a lot of hardship to explain to them what was modern dancing. I then showed them the choreography I have presented during the Jeune Talents de Lyautey, my school 's charitable annual event. Neither their beliefs nor their culture seemed to hamp their enjoyment and their reaction was surpinsingly more enthusiastic than that of my sophisticated high-school mates. I love how dance is universal and it fades out the performer, leaving only the essence and revealing a message that only one's heart can decipher. Enhanced by the natural ambience, and by the connection that I established, I felt perfectly content at that place.

Juniperus thurifera is flourishing in this zone. This tree is a major reason why I adore this place: I can relate to it. First, because it remebers me where I come from. Second, because it is tenacious and unyielding, like me when it comes to reaching my goals. It revives from cracks beetween the rocks and in the most extreme climates to extend and thrive, despite the opressive conditions. It is fine, like me when it comes to art. Its streched branches reminisces me the rigorous yet reviving postures in gymnastics and classical dancing ; and its incense reminds me of the subtle chess techniques I so curiously developped on a set made of it's wood. And lastly, it is altruistic, like my friends see me. This tree provides medication for the villagers - success is a synonym of cooperation to me.

This experience made me aware of how important our environment is. Although I feel like if I had a more supporting entourage, I could have achieved more; but it is up to us to get adapted because we never choose our envionment, we only choose how to deal whith it. Destructing our environment would be erasing our most common good. Protecting it is necessary and fundeamental and the goal of my commitment. That is why I am enrolled in Ecolyautey. Here in Morocco, minor modifications can have a very positif butterfly effect; and sensibilisation, as the plastic bag photo contest I am organising aims to, can change so many things.

Growing up in a unloving environment was the hardest. All my motivation, my determination and my willpower had to come from within. If I didn't chose my environment, I chose my friends who helped me overcome being gay in Morocco. And I psycholed my needs seeking gratitude and encouragements in my teachers and my identity in the international option for the baccalaureate wich envolves an additional 6 hours of arabic literacy and 4 hours of bilingual History and Geography, and gave me knowledge about two different cultures, the European and the Arabic one. As a sensitive person, having to build such a strong shell gave me an speical meaning of the notion of environment. Now, I am very proud of who I've become.

Today, I have another need. A need that is shared and common to all human beings. A need to protect not my but our environment. A need that I could'nt be anymore ready to fulfill.
loumap   
Dec 27, 2013
Undergraduate / TRIP TO COUNTRYSIDE; PERFECTLY CONTENT [3]

iacero

Thank you very much for you help

I am really confused, you pointed out very important points. Actually, I really don't have much to say about my trip to the countryside but since I am applying for Environmental studies and since the random topic option is not availble anymore on commonapp, I figured out it could blend well with all the rest. I do agree with the fact that these are two different topics but what can I do, I don't know how to make them into one cohesive one :/

For the "Goud" word, I didn't mean to talk about God but Goud who's a philosopher of evolution and who states that humanity is the result of a totally random process and not that of a determined one.

For the word "psycholed", I actually meant to say the psycological term of "sublimated" . Some say that "sublimated' is true, other say that the actual precise translation is psycholed but it is so rare I don't think it is accurate. I also tought about "rendered" or simply "dealt with".

If you can give me some advice about how I could structure the essay so that the two topics go along togheter it would be so precious !

Thank you again for your help!
loumap   
Dec 27, 2013
Undergraduate / My interview at Connecticut College; Why Connecticut College? [4]

Hello
I think that your aswer is clear and honest and that is a good point. Referring precisely to these activites does show your interest.
However, I think that you overused the world 'interested' ( or interesting ), which doesn't really gives a lot of information or shows a strong determination. I think you could just need this little 'punch' to make it stronger. Maybe add a 'definitely' or 'really' somewhere, for instance "I can definitely see myself at Connecticut College.
loumap   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / "The Tree of Possibles" by Bernard Weber - insight in natural sciences is more important [5]

Hello !

I think you answered the question clearly and subtly. Your first paragraph is very good. However, your last conclusion doesn't really sound like it have been learned from the experience you describe before. You might want to change your conslusion, or to make the text have rigor as an important point of your experience. I wan see the attempt with the "strictly" but try to talk about rigor in analyzing the data , How strictly were the control variables set ?

That I think is the only thing that could enforce you essay, but overall it is great !
loumap   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / Ť Grains de philo ť Writing supplements dilmma! ; "Why Yale" [4]

Hello, I am aplying to 20 universities and I had problems that caused me to wait until today to do the writing supplements. The thing is, I am very hesitating about copying the same response for the same question for different universities, just changing the names etc.

There is my "Why Yale" question ? Should I do the same for all the other ones ? I would really use some advice and correction ! I also might add it as an answer to what motivated you to apply ?

Since I have known about Yale thru my science teacher in 8th grade, who referred to it as a place that could potentially solves the world's problems, I knew that Yale is where I belong. Few people understood my stubborn answer to 'What do you want to do in life' that permanently resulted in these four letters; the luckiest were getting "School of Forestry & Environmental Studies". But I knew what I was aiming for: whether it is for its amazingly rich, diverse and open-minded student body, or its bright, praiseworthy and dedicated scholars, Yale is unquestionably where I would achieve more.

And there is the 'talk about one of your ECs question"

« Grains de philo » (seeds of philosophy) is probably the most pleasant activity of my week. It is a club where we gather to « produce ideas », and sharing them creates a infinite and plentiful mine of thoughts. The main theme is the body, and I chose to work on dance: what is a dancing body compared to a non dancing body? What does dancing involves on a spiritual, social and personal level? Watching Sakharova's and Pina Baucsh's performances with the teacher and discussing them is such a fun an enriching moment that it definitely makes this philosophy club a brain-teasing yet delightful moment.

(I might eventually add a little conclusion for the universities that ask how did it affect our personality )
loumap   
Dec 28, 2013
Undergraduate / "The Tree of Possibles" by Bernard Weber - insight in natural sciences is more important [5]

Hello, there is my answer to the same question. I figured out that maybe we could help each other. I know it is not very personal but I didn't learn to do so.

I believe that both insight and rigor have an equally important role in mathematics and natural sciences. Insight is fundamental to the creation of a science. When I learned about Pythagore, I realized that this school discovered the theorem insightfully: rigor would have actually stopped the free brain-teasing and the proliferation of ideas. Insight is to creation what rigor is to application. In fact, what would be the aim of the natural sciences if they weren't applied rigorously? To use our knowledge acquired through natural sciences, we have to attain accuracy. Would you imagine a Doctor gently waiting for the results on his patient? Although his goodwill and watchful eyes are irreprocheable, his intuition needs a meticulously foreseeing process to succeed.

Furthermore, Maths and Natural sciences are inherently associated to each other and these two qualities find themselves always revolving around each other. The more we know about Maths, the more we are able to verify and assert physical and biological rules. Developping functions gave us the ability to predict the upcoming results by the vertices and the slope of a function. Although one would insightfully remark that if the clouds are aggregated, it might rain; this information is very poor compared to what a meteorologist can tell using precisely gathered data and riorously developped models.

The best way we can use natural science to our benefit is not only by cheking and taking note of the exeprimental results, but being able to ensure the issue of an experiment what requires exactitude; insight couldn't forecast the effects of global warming and we are now dismally looking backward at that event.

Thus, I think that rigor and insight are both part of the same process and mastering not only one of them, but both of them at the same time is what makes a scientific.
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