Scholarship / Learning is like sailing against water current ; MSP SCHOLARSHIP [3]

Some grammatical changes are necessary. Here are some things that stood out:

- "Learning is like sailing against water current, we cannot move forward without putting effort." (the period needs to be inside the quotations)
- I look forward to seizing
- but in order to meet such a goal
- covers the developing
- "get involved" maybe "become involved" would be more formal
- morever,

general note: remove spaces between words and commas or periods

Undergraduate / Closed my laptop - Stanford Intellectual Vitality Essay [2]

"By preventing myself from being able to delete my writing at the press of a key"

Undergraduate / WHY UCHICAGO-- where I love coffee, microscopes, and people. [4]

interesting and unique!

through my veins and faithfully increasing my odds of clinical illness. (needs subject-verb agreement) try changing to: through my veins that faithfully increase my odds of clinical illness

also, you might want to consider using semicolons (;) instead of commas b/c "the buttery caramel drizzle", "the dash of espresso", and "the thirty two...clinical illness" are all full sentences. it's up to you

mid-sized
forty-minute
maybe the before opportunities around South Side

it would be great if you could take a look at mine

Undergraduate / Delirious - The Common App Essay #2 Struggle! Me and my Mountains [5]

Interesting!

I suggest you decide on a tense. You begin in the past and switch to the present, and then back to the past again. There needs to be consistency throughout the essay.

Undergraduate / "Tin soldiers" Common App Esssay [3]

Intriguing essay! It might just be me but it's a bit hard to follow.

Undergraduate / Affairs of UN member countries - Vanderbilt extracurricular essay! Model UN experiences [2]

Nicely written!
Maybe you could add more personal anecdotes about how your MUN experience was unique?

Undergraduate / Ones that help Eeyores grow into Tiggers; Tigger or an Eeyore? [2]

Interesting, unique essay!