Writing Feedback / a short essay describing yourself as a person [3]

a short essay describing yourself as a person as well as yout long term carrer aspirations.

College is something I have looked forward to all my life. I had dreams to change the world. Now the time has come to turn those dreams into a reality. College is an experience that will prepare me to conquer hesitations and change lives. A wonderful path to change lives, I believe, would be nursing. I have always enjoyed science classes. I believe science allows you to explore new ideas and depths to discover yourself and your surroundings. I plan on attending the University of Central Missouri to major in nursing in the fall of 2014. I would love to be a pediatric nurse to help children. The most important years in one's lifetime are when they are young growing up. Children are always leaning new concepts and trying to understand life. The potential affect a nurse could have on a kid is immeasurable. It could be the only chance a child gets accurate help for a problem. Children tend to get scared and can't communicate issues. To possibly be an opening to help children communicate their issues and help families learn how to care for their children is an opportunity to change the world to me. I also want to attend college to better myself as a whole. I strive to be a successful well rounded person who can contribute to my community. I must be able to support myself out in the "real-world." There are no guarantees there will be someone to help me and back me up financially. I have acquired skills to support myself and I will not be forced to be dependent on someone else's financial backing. I want to be a role model to my community and family. I want to be respected for my intelligence and love for children. I appreciate you considering me for this opportunity to fulfill my dream in becoming a nurse, to make a difference.

Scholarship / Explain any financial needs/situations that might clarify your need for a scholarship: [2]

Explain any financial needs/situations that might clarify your need for a scholarship:
I deserve to have a scholarship for many reasons. My high attendance, academic achievement, motivation for college, and to achieve better is all reasons I deserve a scholarship. In my entire schooling career I have had minimal absences and was rarely missing school. I have obtained above a 95% attendance rate in my high school years, and plan to do the same in college. Another reason I deserve a scholarship is because I have worked hard most of my life academically. In high school I have obtained at least a 3.3 GPA all years of high school. My junior year in high school I took two advanced placement courses and I am taking one my senior year. When given an assignment I feel obligated to complete it as well as excel to make it stand out. I want to push myself to be the best I can and I fell college is a great place to better myself, but I can't pay for it all myself. In high school I never really had time for a job, because I was busy with cheerleading, attending church, going to school, and helping my family. I realize in today's financial situation you need to earn everything, and put your blood, sweat in tears into it. I will do my very best to complete my goal and dreams in life in order to support myself in the future. Winning a scholarship would mean I am one step closer to pursing my dream to become a nurse, and get a higher education needed for this career to make a difference in this world. I am hopeful to become one of your scholarships recipients, so I can continue my education to become a nurse in the future.

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