Writing Feedback / IELTS; electricity volume for two major seasons in UK [2]

The graphs compare changes in the electricity volume for two major seasons and the proportion of electric energy consumed by the British for four different reasons.

It can be clearly seen that on a daily basis, much more units of electricity are demanded in winter as compared to that in summer. It is also noticeable that the main purpose for utilizing electricity is to heat rooms and water items.

The line graph gives information that the consumption of electricity during the typical winter day ranges from 30000 to 50000, peaking to just under 49000 units at 21.00. While the volume of electricity in summer days changes between about 12000 and 20000 over the 24-hour period. Furthermore the highest units of electricity is experienced at 13.00 and 22.00, with 20000 units.

From a pie chart, about a half of the electric usage is consumed due to heating buildings and water in UK. This figure is threefold higher than the second demanded pattern. Only 17% of overall electricity is used by people for the machines namely, ovens, kittens, washing equipment. Finally, both categories of ''Tv, radio lighting'' and ''vacuum cleaner, mixer, electric tools'' are utilized the same amount of electric power, at 15% on each.

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Writing Feedback / IELTS: Men and women are having children late. 'it can be more beneficial' [4]

In some countries around the world men and women are having children late in life. What are the reasons for this development? What are the effects on society and family life?

As globalization grows apace, it has been experienced that most adults tend to give priority to have children later than in previous decades. There is a common belief that economic condition of individuals and social problems are the main reasons for this concern. And it can be resulted in some huge effects on society and family relationship.

Firstly, the cost of products and services which contribute to this phenomenon has been increased significantly in the total context of life. Practically, the tremendous financial burden on young couples may trigger difficult challenges. Therefore they directly are exposed postpone the decision of possessing new baby until they enable to better off financially. Secondly, it is also an inevitable fact that women are more reluctant to give a birth before they succeed to constant salary. Taking career preference as an example, most of young woman employee have an attitude to neglect her family life. In addition, Both genders may have parenthood fears regarding to take care of new kids regularly. This leads to increase the number of single people in the world.

Nevertheless, the consequences of delaying process cannot be neglected. For society, it can be contribute to alarming situation about declining of total world population. For example, when the figure for inhabitants follows a fall, it will directly cause the collapse of production volume in the all countries. Admittedly, this will be resulted in reduction on demand and supply rate. As the family prospective, they can get more opportunity of free time in young ages and various activities, for instance, they are more likely to participate in for relaxation purposes. So they can provide better life for other member of family after themselves.

In summary, it seems to me that both reasons and effects indicate the fact that leading a better life with children can be more beneficial in later ages.