mrs rafey
Apr 25, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 1 : Number of childeren ever born from mother aged 40-45 [6]
The words like overall and while are supporting words so you can use just one in one sentence.
Like in the start you wrote "overall,while the percentage of the number of baby birth varied markedly "
So , you better had to written "overall , the percentage of the number of baby birth varied markedly"
:)
Nice writing . .carry on . . :)
The words like overall and while are supporting words so you can use just one in one sentence.
Like in the start you wrote "overall,while the percentage of the number of baby birth varied markedly "
So , you better had to written "overall , the percentage of the number of baby birth varied markedly"
:)
Nice writing . .carry on . . :)