Undergraduate / Common App Transfer - Arriving at Equilibrium (Communications Major) [5]

I am compassionate about adding insight to complex ideas to create those meanings and can but hope that my ideas receive the same care.
- I paraphrased this sentence in order for your essay's readers to better understand it.

nonetheless.
- This is a spelling error.

Other than those two corrections, your essay is pretty much perfect. You're a very good writer.

Undergraduate / 'Dutch - my mother language' - Application Essay for University of Cincinnati [4]

Hi! I hope this help! :) Good luck!

At the tender age of two, I have learned the basics of the Dutch vocabulary, my mother language. Because of that my mother and grandmother encouraged me to study the French language under their tutelage. This privilege granted me a head start on the other pupils as I was able to focus on all the other classes instead of struggling to learn a new language.

Combining my extra time with tough work, I have always been one of the best achieving pupils of my primary and high school years.
Listening to a wide variety of music, my biggest passion, has enabled me to discover and learn the English language. This was once more extremely helpful at the time I took my first English class; that instantly turned into a favorite subject of mine.

My interest in the language didn't only develop from listening to music, my first trip to the West Coast of the United States exposed me to the purity and beauty of American culture. That is what further triggered my curiosity with the language and the country itself. A later trip to New York city had further inflamed my passion and adoration for the country and I've determined that yes, I'm travelling to hit the books in America.

My knowledge of French and Dutch in addition to my exposure to Belgian culture could be an enrichment to the University of Cincinnati as a place for intellectual and personal development, while this experience could be an enrichment to my own evolution.