Writing Feedback / "water car" - If I could invent something new [4]

Hi, I am mexican guy and I am new at this forum, could you please help me to review my essay?

1. If you could invent something new, what product would you develop? Use specific details to explain why this invention is needed.

The beginning of an invention begins always dreaming about it, and personally I have many dreams. Generally speaking, if I could invent something new, it would be something that would make an impact in our society; I would invent a car which uses directly water as its fuel (let's call it "water car"), instead of fossil fuels such as gasoline or natural gas. I explain below some arguments to defend this stance.

First of all, cars play an important role in our everyday life. Cars have become the essential piece of our day-to-day conveyance. Going to work, doing groceries or just transporting from one place to another are examples of how we use this kind of transportation. In the place where I live, public transportation is a bad choice to travel from one place to other, therefore the use of automobiles as a personal way to transport are very used. I dare to say we depend of this kind of transportation; we depend of its comfort and its privacy.

Secondly, in addition cars play an important role in our everyday life, the increase use of cars have resulted in the increase of air pollution. This consequently results in the increase of respiratory deceases as well as the lost of healthy ecosystems. The importance of air pollution is high throughout the world and people try to find a way to reduce this. In this manner a "water car" would be a precursor of this important trend.

Lastly, beyond the importance of cars in our everyday life and also the fact that the increase use of cars have resulted in the increase of air pollution, I strongly believe that "water cars" would be an important innovation difficult to resist, this due to the fact that water is deeply cheaper than fossil fuels are. In a beginning water cars may be more expensive, but it will be an important investment for our life, just image how cheap will be to travel from one place to another using this kind of transportation.

To sum up, I strongly believe this invention will be a turning point in the way we see transportation, this will bring with itself a lot of benefits for our society such as the reduction in market product's cost and the encourage of touristic places (this due to it will be cheaper to travel from one place to other).

Writing Feedback / Parents are the best teachers - they teach us at any time, with no any fee [2]

Hello again, this is my second post, I am preparing for the TOEFL IBT and this is obviusly for Independent Writing Task. Please take a look to this.. :)

15) Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We do certainly know that teachers in school will not teach us how to forgive or even how to love, undoubtedly parents do. Hence, I totally agree with the fact that parents are the best teachers. I will further explain some reasons in order to support my stance.

Firstly, one of the reasons parents are best teachers is because they are full time teachers. This means they are always there for us, no matter whether we are a bad son or daughter, they will always teach us how to be better children or better people; no matter if it is day or night, they will be there to apprehend us; no matter if we show how we love them, they will always show us how much they love us. For instance, I can recall when I was in elementary school I used to disobey my parents when they used to tell me to clear my room (in the morning or the evening). I never pay attention to their words, and still they were patients at any time of the day to keep teaching me.

In addition, another important reasons parents are best teachers is because the education from our parents is for free. We do not have to pay to our parents to teach us how to behave correctly, how to be polite and even how to love. Tell me, have you ever paid to your dad or mom when he just gave you and advice? On the contrary to what happens in school where teachers used to charge you certain amount of money for education, and this is actually a payment our parents do. Our parents will not charge us any fee, but they only will ask us to help in the housework.

Lastly, parents are best teachers because they teach us manners; teach us how to forgive and how to love. It is truth that education we receive in our home is entirely different to what we receive in school. In fact, school teachers used to refer to parents that children have to be educated firstly from home, what I mean by this is that parents are the precursors of teaching us manners, how to behave polite or how to respect other people. Besides, parents teach us how to forgive when they forgive us first, and teach us how to love when they give everything for us.

Based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that parents are the best teachers. They teach at any time, with no any fee and the most important teach us because they love us.