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Name: April Lo
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lewyne   
Jun 8, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Online learning or real school? Provide your opinion. [5]

Some people say that online learning is the most effective and convenient way to learn. Others say that online learning will never be as effective as learning at a real school, in person. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The advancement of the Internet has a great impact on the development of online educational programs. Inasmuch as many people would agree that receiving education online is the most efficient and accessible way of learning, many would argue that it will never be as effective as attending classes at an actual classroom setting. This essay will discuss both these positions and offer my opinion.

According to some people, the most suitable and efficient way of learning is online education. This is primarily because it saves time, money and effort, wherein online classes and programs can be accessed via the Internet with just a click of the mouse, and that they are not difficult to schedule and fit in to one's life activities. Scheduling, registrations and submission of work can be done hassle-free without having to deal with traffic jams, unexpected bad weather conditions or even queuing to accomplish transactions, which also aids in eliminating transportation fees and other expenditures not needed in attending classes online. Also, virtual lessons help students develop their Internet and technological skills and it encourages responsible learning since course completion requirements such as assignments, projects, activities and case studies are being monitored.

However, many argue that online education will never be as effective as actively learning from a real school. Multi-learning can be achieved when students attend classroom lectures, where they can not only listen to the educators, but also see visual cues via a PowerPoint presentation or white board notes and personally participate in live discussions. There is a lesser chance of miscommunication in actively attending classroom classes since nonverbal cues like facial expressions and body language can be observed. Interactions with the other students are also possible where they can learn and benefit with each others' experiences.

In conclusion, there are arguments that support online learning to be the most effective and accessible way of gaining proper education while other argue that it is not as good as attending actual classroom classes. In my opinion, effective learning, either from a virtual or a real school, can be achieved if the student has the qualities of a diligent learner; therefore, regardless of the method of education, the success of learning is dependent on how a student utilizes his educational tools.
lewyne   
Jun 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS pie chart and table - agricultural crisis [6]

Sheiz, your format on task 1 is different from mine but your work is good. You just need a little bit of polishing in the use of conjunctions. :)
lewyne   
Jun 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Steps in the hiring process [5]

The diagram shows the steps in the hiring process at a large corporation.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

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The diagram illustrates the process on how a large company hires an employee.

On the whole, it can be observed that a step-by-step process must be followed before an employee can be permanently hired in a big company.

Initially, the applicant must fill in and submit his application form to the hiring personnel and then, he is required to be present in the initial interview to determine his status upon meeting the basic requirements for qualification. If he did not meet the needs to be qualified, he is then declined of the job employment. On the other hand, if the applicant met the basic qualifications, he will be scheduled to take a standardized test of skills ability, which he has to pass in order to be able to proceed to the next step.

Once the applicant has completed and earned an adequate grade from the test, he will be accepted to temporarily work in the company for six months, which will be followed by an evaluation of the on-probation employee's work performance.

After the evaluation, the result would be revealed, which will then be the basis of the company's decision if the applicant will be accepted or not. If the evaluation shows no recommendations, the employee will be removed from the job. However, if the result shows a positive evaluation with good recommendation, he will be offered a lasting job position in the company.



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lewyne   
Jun 9, 2014
Writing Feedback / IELTS: Steps in the hiring process [5]

Most of our task 1 introductions are one-liners but I'll raise this issue to my teacher though. I cannot add up the 'on the whole...' part because that is my 'overall statement'.

They said, using personal pronouns are quite unbiased. You may substitute it with an individual, a person or an applicant instead. :-)

The IDP teacher and our instructor said that it is okay to use pronouns to represent the subject but it has to be a 'he' for it encompasses all genders. It is also applicable in writing task 2. But my work here is quite redundant in the usage of 'he'. I should work on that. :D
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