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IELTS pie chart and table - agricultural crisis


tinubalde 1 / 7 1  
Jun 5, 2014   #1
The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Answer: 178 words
The given pie chart presents the different reason for land degradation globally. On the other hand, the table illustrates the percentage of soil degradation and its causes on three regions in the year 1990.

It is clear that over-grazing contributed as the highest percentage of land degradation all over the world accounting to more than a third. However, deforestation and over-cultivation were the second major reasons which added to almost 60% while other factors that lead to land degradation comprise less than 10% of the total percentage.

As per region, Europe leads by almost a quarter in total land degradation wherein 9.8% accounted from deforestation and the rest were from over-cultivation and over-grazing. On the other hand, Oceania was the second highest in percentage and its only causes were from deforestation and over-grazing which contributes to less than 15% of the total land degradation. North America which was the lowest percentage from the rest only got 5% on total land degradation.

Overall, the region affected by majority of land degradation during 1990 was Europe. Whereas, the main reason of land degradation all over the world was over-grazing.
OP tinubalde 1 / 7 1  
Jun 6, 2014   #2
Sorry I forgot to attach. Here's the image...



fikri 5 / 317 71  
Jun 7, 2014   #3
The given pie chart presents the different reason for land degradation globally. On the other hand, the table illustrates the percentage of soil degradation and its causes on three regions in the year 1990.

it seems to me that it is better if you put moreover rather than using 'on the other hand'
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jun 8, 2014   #4
Overall, the region affected by majority of land degradation during 1990 was Europe. Whereas, the main reason of land degradation all over the world was over-grazing (It is much better to move this general trend to the end of the introduction. The conclusion must be something on the basis of the body, which is different from general trend.) .

Good job,
Hope you find the comments useful.
OP tinubalde 1 / 7 1  
Jun 8, 2014   #5
Hi Ahmad!

I think my writing is still not enough, I need a 7 for me to pass. Anyway, your tips are very helpful.

Thank you so much

Tina :-)
lewyne 2 / 4  
Jun 9, 2014   #6
Sheiz, your format on task 1 is different from mine but your work is good. You just need a little bit of polishing in the use of conjunctions. :)


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