Ricardo
Jun 8, 2014
Writing Feedback / When I was 8 years old, I learnt how to play a guitar and sing popular songs [3]
I wrote the following text:
"When I was about eight years old, my parents gave me a guitar and paid a particular instructor to teach me how to play that instrument and sing some popular songs. I enjoyed very much that lessons, and started to buy regularly specialized magazines with popular songs and ciphers, so that quickly I was able to learn how to play songs by myself. The authors of the songs were, in the beginning years, Brazilian popular artists, and eventually, my interest migrated to the English composers, particularly "The Beatles" and "The Moody Blues". When I became a teenager, Brazilian's government was a dictatorship, and my favorite composer was Chico Buarque, whose songs criticized the regime with subtlety intelligent lyrics, and I've learned to play and sing almost all of his compositions. Well, I continued to play and sing in the high school, in the university, and even after started working on my job. I started to date my current wife in a party, where we've sing some tunes together. I've singed to my daughter and friends until I was about forty years old, and after that, I didn't want to do it anymore. Maybe, in the future, I have the mood to play and sing again."
Is it OK?
I wrote the following text:
"When I was about eight years old, my parents gave me a guitar and paid a particular instructor to teach me how to play that instrument and sing some popular songs. I enjoyed very much that lessons, and started to buy regularly specialized magazines with popular songs and ciphers, so that quickly I was able to learn how to play songs by myself. The authors of the songs were, in the beginning years, Brazilian popular artists, and eventually, my interest migrated to the English composers, particularly "The Beatles" and "The Moody Blues". When I became a teenager, Brazilian's government was a dictatorship, and my favorite composer was Chico Buarque, whose songs criticized the regime with subtlety intelligent lyrics, and I've learned to play and sing almost all of his compositions. Well, I continued to play and sing in the high school, in the university, and even after started working on my job. I started to date my current wife in a party, where we've sing some tunes together. I've singed to my daughter and friends until I was about forty years old, and after that, I didn't want to do it anymore. Maybe, in the future, I have the mood to play and sing again."
Is it OK?
