tiennguyen
Jun 26, 2014
Writing Feedback / 'I like football and music' - ESSAY on my HOBBIES [5]
Can you please read my essay and make corrections to it? Also, can you tell me if I need to add some more stuff or take something out? This is my last hope and I really need to get this done.
Today, I will write about interest of mine. I very like football, and listen music. I always listen music online, because I usually online working on my computer. I like eat meat, fish and drink coffee. I like stuffing the Internet, and written blog, it about technical.
Do you like football?, if you like football, what is name team your like? And a player you like, name of player your like. If you don't like football, why? Please, explain.
I think, if I stress, I will sing a karaoke with my friend, in living very much stress, sometimes it make your tired. It will make always tired. Sometime I distraction, because I surfing the Internet, access Facebook and youtube. I interest read electronic newspapers because it very much or rich information, and I don't much money buy paper. I always wake up later, that is reason by last night I go to bed at midnight at 3 a.m, I don't remember an hour exactly, but it is in the range that 3-4h a.m.
Follow you, Are they should go to bed late? you can talk when you go to bed.
Final, I'm pause at here. I promise next topic I will write best.
Good bye and see you again next day.
Can you please read my essay and make corrections to it? Also, can you tell me if I need to add some more stuff or take something out? This is my last hope and I really need to get this done.
Today, I will write about interest of mine. I very like football, and listen music. I always listen music online, because I usually online working on my computer. I like eat meat, fish and drink coffee. I like stuffing the Internet, and written blog, it about technical.
Do you like football?, if you like football, what is name team your like? And a player you like, name of player your like. If you don't like football, why? Please, explain.
I think, if I stress, I will sing a karaoke with my friend, in living very much stress, sometimes it make your tired. It will make always tired. Sometime I distraction, because I surfing the Internet, access Facebook and youtube. I interest read electronic newspapers because it very much or rich information, and I don't much money buy paper. I always wake up later, that is reason by last night I go to bed at midnight at 3 a.m, I don't remember an hour exactly, but it is in the range that 3-4h a.m.
Follow you, Are they should go to bed late? you can talk when you go to bed.
Final, I'm pause at here. I promise next topic I will write best.
Good bye and see you again next day.