Writing Feedback / The best and most cheerful memories we have from our children time [5]

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Can you give me your opinion on my essay and whether or not if i am capable of getting a score 5.5/9 on this essay. I want to point out that this is my first essay so i know it won't be that good. Thank you for your help.

Is the childhood of each person one of the most unforgettable and happiest moments? It is said that the childhood is the most cherishing and joyful time in a person's life.Some people believe that the friendships made and never-ending football matches or hide and seek games are one of the main reasons of having a wonderful childhood.Whereas others think that the tragic moments such as child abuse or being bullied could lead to a unpleasant and dramatic past.

In the first place,not everyone's childhood is perfect, for some it may be the hardest and toughest time of their lives.For example being bullied as kids,being abused by their parents or someone who might have passed away ,these dramatic moments leave scars on a person's past that can still affect him till this very day.On the other hand, as children we tend not to be worried about the tasks that adults face on a daily bases.For example such as financial struggles and economic crisis.

In conclusion,it is clear for most people that childhood is the most wonderful time in our lives,despite the first life lessons we have could be either pleasant or crucial.Otherwise, the best and most cheerful memories we have had would be as children.

Writing Feedback / It is interesting to point out that the number of people buying books in Germany consistently rose [2]

The graph shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany,France,Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.If you could please give a mark 0/9.Thank you .

It can clearly be seen that the highest amount of money spent on books by people is in Germany (around 95 million) and the least by Italy (around 60 million).

The number of people buying books in Germany draw about 80 million dollars in 1995 , but there were fluctuations for the 10 year period from 1995-2005.However, the figures in France and Italy were approximately the same with a constant trend in 1995 to 1997.Both reached their peaks by the year of 2005 (around 50-75 million).

In Austria ,on the other hand , there was a moderate increase starting 1995 to 1999 then in 2005 a rapid grow to a high of 65 million.Also, in the amount of books sold Austria overtakes Italy in 2003.

It is interesting to point out that the number of people buying books in Germany consistently rose compared to the other countries.